Claim Even though young people often receive the advice to follow your dreams more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals Reason Many people s dreams are inherently selfish Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or

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Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to "follow your dreams," more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.

Reason: Many people's dreams are inherently selfish.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.

The training of the dreams and aspirations of individuals have over the years taken a progressive yet diverse direction due to its complexity. One can observe from the times whereby people are trained only by their parents, to now where these training are done within the four walls of an institution. However, concluding and following this path only on the basis of the quixotic dreams of persons is not entirely holistic, as the so-called 'inherently selfish' dreams are one of the reasons we have diversity in path. I mostly disagree with the claim that though flexibility should be given to young ones in picking their path, this allowance should be trained because young people are selfish for two reason.

First, the popular story of Sir Isaac Newton is one of such undirected or unsupervised goals that has forever changed the direction of science. From Newton, who was at some point considered the dullest of his pairs, where his teacher never saw that he could amount to anything of relevance to the society - which was true at the time, came the three laws of motion; On these laws have advancement such as creation of cars, planes, even space exploration been built. At the time, there was no known need, or understanding that metal could fly, or that it will considerably reduce the amount of time people spend on the road.

Secondly, man is no longer limited in productivity due to the natural length of the availability of light, sunlight. Thomas Edison, who is known for his creation of electricity in bulbs, and his failing at it 99 times, made this possible. At the time, everyone thought him crazy for pursuing such futile, or better yet, 'inherently selfish' goals, which were unguided, and I'm sure, it's relevance couldn't be understood at that time. But now, years down the line, every single thing man does is based guided by the so-called 'unworthy goals'. For example, the phones we use require electricity to function; working late into the night, even at times, 24 hours require electricity. It is seen that power drives economy, and without it, it is safe to say, we would have been thousands of years behind.

I concede however that directing a passion allows for more directional application in the known fields of need in the society. For example, a person who has a flair for building stuff, can be guided into majoring in fields such as Mechanical Engineering, where they can practically apply this dream, through intense training. But, for better expansion of the society, one would agree that radicality has brought about the availability of diverse work, need, and an opportunity for futuristic creation, that has never before been seen, or thought of.

In conclusion then, guided path in achieving dreams, is as important as the misunderstood 'unworthy' dreams. So, flexibility should both be guided and allowed free rain.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, second, secondly, so, then, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2380.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95833333333 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64830593383 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.406418749 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.222222222 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147776926843 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422055846376 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558332984037 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736471443993 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644856519689 0.0667264976115 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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