CLAIM: No act is done purely for the benefit of others.
REASONS: All actions- even those that seem to be done for other people-are based on self interest.
Humans are considered as the most intelligent and moral species in the world. Co-operation, support and unity has always been some of the factors that differentiate human from others but with advancement and modernization , beneficent acts are being less common and people are getting more self-centered and most of their acts involve the intentions of getting profits rather than contributing selflessly for the society. So , I mostly agree with the prompt saying that acts purely intended to be devoted for others are very rare now. One of the reasons that corroborates the claim indicates some social services that are done to deceive people but actually a way of advertising and promoting their own business by the capitalists. They launch charity events with flamboyant decorations in front of press, electronic media and other social influencers but the solo motivation for all of these is to get people acquainted with their new products. No one checks whether the fund actually reaches to the poor or not and investors like to buy company’s share and people want to buy products hoping that a portion of the gain will be delivered to the lower class but mostly that doesn’t happen. Another example can be the political campaign during the election. Before the election, suddenly development works increase rapidly and the elected candidate who wants to regain the position, try to manipulate people’s mind with his immediate responses and masses sometimes judge him with his recent activities rather than all that he should have done but didn’t in his last couple of years in power. That means most of the public services are not effective but ostentatious display of upper class.
For another reason,it can be said that to work dedicatedly for others, one has to deviate himself from all luxuries and comfort and should lead an austere life mostly focusing on humanitarian work. But with a short span of life, human mind wants to have all the comforts they want. That’s why it’s actually hard to manage time for voluntary works most think as secondary. For instance,in a world of competition and rush, people only care about getting higher. The more anyone get, the more they desire and they are interested in going to the pinnacle where all successes will be at his fist. Even doing so, they sometimes don’t know what is the situation of their neighbour or the poor living in the slum across their own street. They don’t want to share the income of their hard work where a society is about people of all walks of life. But with the busy cycle of life, the poor and low classes can’t keep their pace due to poverty. That emphasizes the point of having less cases where the main focus is the development of masses with zero benefit.
Although there are some examples where people think out of the boxes and listen to their inner voices rather than thinking practically. They sacrifice their life for the greater good of community who needs help during disasters and calamities. Mother Teressa , known worldwide for being an idol in the field of voluntary work. She not only take care of them but also motivate others to do so and results are now conspicuous. International organizations like Red Crescent,UNESCO etc are working monotonously without thinking of any mutual benefit. And the young generations are also joining their ventures. During the pandemic, adolescents are seen distributing pamphlets and demonstrating how to wash hands properly and maintain hygiene and they are doing this by moral and social responsibilities rather than getting paid by some corporations.
So the conclusion can be done by saying despite having some instances of altruistic events, mostly all our aim is to focus on achievement for our own and the moral ‘charity begins at home’ is the unfortunate truth now-a-days.
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- CLAIM No act is done purely for the benefit of others REASONS All actions even those that seem to be done for other people are based on self interest 66
- CLAIM No act is done purely for the benefit of others REASONS All actions even those that seem to be done for other people are based on self interest 83
- CLAIM No act is done purely for the benefit of others REASONS All actions even those that seem to be done for other people are based on self interest 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...tion, support and unity has always been some of the factors that differentiate human from o...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s but with advancement and modernization , beneficent acts are being less common a...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tributing selflessly for the society. So , I mostly agree with the prompt saying t...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...play of upper class. For another reason,it can be said that to work dedicatedly fo...
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Suggestion: , in
...ks most think as secondary. For instance,in a world of competition and rush, people...
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Line 2, column 476, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...e about getting higher. The more anyone get, the more they desire and they are inte...
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Line 2, column 971, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun cases is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ty. That emphasizes the point of having less cases where the main focus is the devel...
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Line 2, column 992, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...he point of having less cases where the main focus is the development of masses with zero ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...disasters and calamities. Mother Teressa , known worldwide for being an idol in th...
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Suggestion: , UNESCO
...national organizations like Red Crescent,UNESCO etc are working monotonously without th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, second, so, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 14.8657303371 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3202.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 636.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03459119497 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73704043671 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 334.0 215.323595506 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525157232704 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 990.9 704.065955056 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.6695035078 60.3974514979 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.153846154 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15384615385 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252612943495 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618435773928 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533913081409 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145608819719 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596866170878 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 100.480337079 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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