Claim: While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self-satisfaction, it should really be a source of embarrassment.
Reason: Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The rapid shift of tasks from man to machine had made humans lazy and weak giving them loads of free time which is the main cause of boredom. The prompt states that boredom is considered as a sense of satisfaction, it should in fact be an embarrassing thing. In my opinion, I strongly agree and argue that boredom should be taken as an embarrassment which is caused due to lack of imagination and self-motivation. The following two points will add more light to it.
Firstly, human brain’s potential and power increases when it is given more task and pressure to think about something or prove facts. For instance, artificial intellegence and neural network study and discovery proved that human brain is made up of neurons and network connecting each neutron with other. The malin present in these networks of neutrons will become strong when it is given tasks and things to do, making the brain smart. If humans give their brains, things to imagine and work on, then they won’t be bored. Empty brains make humans weak and would eventually decrease their self-motivation.
Motivation to do things comes from the inner sense of accomplishing great things in life by working hard for it and not wasting time which would remove boredom. For instance, when a person keeps himself involved in tasks and work to accomplish the task and complete it, he won’t get bored as he has a lot of things to do which will keep him busy giving him less free time. In view of this history had been proof that great innovations happened by hard work and dedication. When a person is busy chasing success he won’t get bored.
Even if people consider boredom to be a sense of self-satisfaction showcasing the fact that they have more free time, however, it shows the fact that they are wasting their free time instead they could use it to imagine things and bring them to life, giving the world a new great discovery. Motivated People who imagine things instead of getting bored and working too hard towards a new innovation are those who will succeed.
- The following was written as a part of an application for a small business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise Currently the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away thus 30
- The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement 50
- Claim While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self satisfaction it should really be a source of embarrassment Reason Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self motivation Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree 75
- The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement 54
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 474, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s happened by hard work and dedication. When a person is busy chasing success he won...
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Line 9, column 384, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...ng bored and working too hard towards a new innovation are those who will succeed.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...innovation are those who will succeed.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, then, for instance, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 355.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60261873522 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535211267606 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8639108453 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.6 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18230640359 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659928589881 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081634564201 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122937020474 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917776903483 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.