Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed
“Education is a life-time career’, as cliché as it might sound, the assertion has affirmed the critical role of education in shaping our existence, one way or the other. However, is education only restricted to those offered by institutional parties and real-life education could be disregarded? I have always been a strong believer in having the balance between these two major drivers to utterly strengthen our intellectual cognition and life skill. Before assessing the supposed weight enforced by educational institution on our career decision, we shall apprehend that, with a vast range of academic structure varied from country to country, there is no single system could proclaim having an encompassing assessment on level of success. Profoundly, there are increasing living proof rejecting the integrative role of academic achievement on professional success. From my point of view, educational institutions should play as collaborative partners in guiding students towards the field of their interests rather than depriving them of chances to fulfill their dream.
Though education is the source of mind-feeding nourishment for the society, due to the varied advancement and ideologies, it has been grounded diversely across nations. There are basically two main streams of teaching paradigm, namely ‘knowledge based’ and ‘interest based’. ‘Knowledge based’ methodology is widely adopted by most Asian counterparts as suggested by an orthodox ‘A book holds a house of gold’. Reading context prevails over experimental and practical undertakings with information acquired in a verbatim manner, resulted in the lack of aspirational understanding. This genre of educational system worship academic credential by student’s mere capability to memorize and replicate paper-knowledge, which have proved to jeopardize students potent to interact in real- environment. The most conspicuous evident could be observed in the scenario of learning a foreign language. Asian students are known to be accelerated in their writing and reading skills while communication has always been the downfall hindering the growth of these individuals in a global pool of talents. These form of educational approach is inefficient in even assessing current existential demand, left alone guiding the student towards the right career path as they claim. However, one might argue that, due to the lack of educational resources, educational institutions should have the right to dissuade unqualified or incompetent students in order to secure a sustainable workforce. The assertion could be absolutely plausible to public institutions where government subsidies are scarce to tolerate any degree of educational freedom. Otherwise, the choice should be handed to the one helming.
Referring to the ‘Interest based’ methodology, let’s take a look at the icon of liberty, the United States, in which freedom is amplified across all aspects of life. Respecting the interest to learn and curiosity to invent, the American dream has always been the golden field for scholars and practitioners. Most American institution provides much higher flexibility for academic matrix, which grants students with possibilities to mix-and-match their own unique package. The key principle is that they would not try to psych you out if your intelligent level is not doing you a favor, contrarily, persistency and dedication to succeed are encouraged. Does this sounds ideal? The system as well being questioned with the advent of ‘drop-outs’ miracles as Bill Gates (founder of Microsoft), Steve Jobs (founder of Apples Technology), John Mackey (founder of Whole Foods Market), forcing us to contemplate the ultimate impact of education on our career success. As a matter of fact, there are no lack of proof that scholarly achievement is not the only road to success. In the case of Jack Ma (founder of e-commerce company- Alibaba), with his dreadful performance in school, he has encountered countless rejection in life, most renown by Harvest- one of the most respectable institution in the world who has as well misread the signal of an ingenious entrepreneur. However, excessive liberals conceded another social downfall with the spur of dropouts spiked over 1.2 million and 25% of high school freshmen fail to graduate from high school on time.
Currently, neither restriction nor freedom provided by education institutions seems to guarantee success. Conclusion being drawn is that no academic systems appeared to be self-sufficient enough to actuate their right to deprive students of their desire in any field. Yielding the balance of providing enough guidance, flexibility and support would be the ultimate solution to avoid latent outcomes or chaotic outbreak in our education system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, then, well, while, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 111.0 58.6224719101 189% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4126.0 2235.4752809 185% => OK
No of words: 718.0 442.535393258 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.74651810585 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17643912491 4.55969084622 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37583082144 2.79657885939 121% => OK
Unique words: 400.0 215.323595506 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557103064067 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 1280.7 704.065955056 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1352419519 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.275862069 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7586206897 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.10344827586 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217443353491 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536092136246 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529000294458 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134864955501 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040549331369 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.37 12.1639044944 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 237.0 100.480337079 236% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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