How childrens are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help about a better society.
Socialization of an individual is not the only factor which determines destiny of a society . In fact, personal conviction, personal motivation and environment to which we are exposed are also imperative in defining destiny of society.However, we should not forget that socialization is nursery to create a healthy , respectful and tolerant society and among all the factors, how childrens are socialized plays the most important role in crafting the character of society. I am consonant with this suggestion. However, the second issue is highly contentious, for different people are entitled to different opinion, some may stand for it but I personally discountenance it.
Socialization of children undergoes lots of stages , during these stages, their mind is seemingly imprinted with a partially permanent belief, which governs what type of human being they are going to be in the future. A child during his socialization, if plagued with negative thoughts , the odds that the children might end up being a criminal or some kind of anti-social is high. Had Martin Luther King not been socialized in discrimination-strucked oppressed environment, he would not have goad himself to fight for emancipation . The stringent environment , in which he was socialized, inspired him to lead the war against discrimination , which ultimately turned out be major factor defining destiny of American society. How can we not say socialization doesn’t determine the destiny of society?
The characterstics of a society depicts how successful we have been in socializing our children. We have actually learned to raise children who can help about a better society. Not before centuries ago , our society was plagued with discrimination and racism which explicitly shows fault in the socialization of human beings; the black peoples always felt chip on their shoulder infront of the white ones. However, Contrary to the earlier situation, modern day peoples are on the same page about inequality and discrimination being menace to the society. Further, we have been able to craft a beautiful society which advocates for disabled, homosexuals, child right, women right and against racism. This shows we have successfully imbued moral and ethics in our children, for they are able to judge what is right and what is wrong and they have learned to act accordingly such that peace of the society remains unharmed.
Some detractors might attribute destiny of the society to personal conviction, nature of our parents, our peer groups and motivation . But is it not the socialization which governs our peer group, personal conviction and motivation? Hence, all in all, socialization of children is not trivial at all but actually the most important factor which determines the nature of the society. And it is completely senseless to say that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help about a better society
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, hence, however, if, may, second, so, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33405639913 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18958524758 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496746203905 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8948867895 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.421052632 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2631578947 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396426100728 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14276572725 0.0831039109588 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165145125366 0.0758088955206 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259536572523 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642904468521 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.