An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be p

In the prompt, it is concluded that in order to defend vitamin A deficiency among people, the government of Tagus should direct their full focus on promoting the new type of millet with high vitamin A. The assumption is made on the basis that new type of millets would be readily adopted by the people as millets are already a staple food for them. However, this claim is based on some unwarranted assumptions which need clarification on three points.

First of all, does the new type of millet show any difference in taste, smell or appearance from the ordinary one? If it is different in taste, people may not adopt this variety despite being a staple food. Several factors such as taste, smell or appearance can alter the opinion of people regarding the new type of millet. Few people would go for the new millet if any of the factors vary from their regular millet in an unpleasent way, just because it contains more vitamin A. So, promoting the breed can end in smoke.

Secondly, is the subsidy provided by government to the farmers enough to make it profitable for the farmers? Many such promises, in reality, do not work out as they look on papers. If the amount of subsidy is not enough, the farmers will go back to cultivating the ordinary breed anyways. All the concentration given on this aspect will not work out consequently.

Thirdly, are the farmers willing to cultivate the new variety of millets? In addition to profit, there are several aspects which influence the decision of the farmers about cultivating the new breed. For exapmple, the breed may be prone to more diseases making to difficult for farming. It may require more work to grow or its growth rate may be slower than the ordinary one. If any such case happens, farmers can be unwilling to produce it regardless of the subsidy provided.

To conclude, engineering a new variety of the staple food of the nation to battle vitamin A deficiency is undoubtedly a good initiative by the government but more research is needed in the aspect to help clarify if the initiative would hold water or not.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in addition, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73351648352 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5936670455 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494505494505 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7573039796 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7222222222 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.21951772744 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424652950491 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121054280174 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851422591516 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217046691055 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850693266609 0.0667264976115 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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