Issue 30: Teachers’ salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that coud be used to challenge your position.
In modern society, many measures have been discussed in order to optimize the efficiency and efficacy of public education. In order to achieve the aim, it is true that higher extent of motivation of teachers is required, as well as more active participation of students. In that respect, I disagree with the given claim that teachers’ salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance, because I believe that it is likely to engender rather negative effects on the education.
It is undeniable that some extent of incentive is indeed a very motivating system for workers, and therefore teachers could be highly motivated. Yet the field may be different, many companies based on information technologies such as Google and Apple are some compelling examples. They guarantee high degree of incentive in order to foment the fervent atmosphere among their employees. This strategy looks very successful, regarding that the workers are indeed showing their best endeavor in their workplaces and also many students aim to get in those companies for such economic compensations. As these conspicuous examples demonstrate, teachers will be very encouraged to construct more efficient form of class with more passionate attitude during their classes.
However, it must be pointed that such motivations could be very ephemeral. Take same companies as examples. Big portion of employees finally quit their job for all the substantial recompense, because they become worn out after several years of arduous works; in other words, burn-out. Those who quit their jobs, seek other small companies that are able to pursue their personal time and quality of life, despite the relatively low level of economic reward. Furthermore, regarding that the academic performance is not accomplished solely by passion of teachers but also by motivated students, certain teachers who experience the meaninglessness of their sincere attitudes will be eventually demoralized. Thus, the “motivation” of the incentive system may rather harm the overall atmosphere of teachers.
Finally, academic performance is not the only crucial factor of education, which is the most important point. There are multiple aims of education, such as improving communication skills and the ability of critical thinking. South Korea would be an epitome that demonstrates the negative effects, which may be born due when teachers are encouraged only for the academic performance. High school students devote themselves only for earning good points in Korean, mathematics, English, and several optional subjects, while almost totally neglecting the importance of music, art, and physical education. Even art teachers relinquish their class, letting their students to study mathematics and English. Nearly no Korean student agrees that this is a beneficial phenomenon. This prominent example proves that the academic accomplishment should not be the only goal of education.
In summary, I believe that teachers should not be offered salaries based only on their students’ scores, since it will finally distress the large portion of teachers, while effacing other important goals of education except earning a good grade. It is very important to discuss various new pedagogic methods and supportive systems in order to enhance the overall level and efficacy of public education. (512 words)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... more active participation of students. In that respect, I disagree with the given...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in summary, such as, as well as, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2856.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55642023346 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94239845548 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54280155642 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 896.4 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1007819554 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.173913043 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.347826087 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272754402202 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729971095734 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641571252409 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155257539179 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337285139748 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 100.480337079 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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