The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People can grow up in a very rich families and still be strong and successful because it depends on their characteristic to use conveniences in good way. The reasoning behind my position as well as a few supporting examples will be provided in brief, in the paragraphs below.
First of all, being rich does not mean that people cannot be successful in their lives. For instance, a rich student, who does not need to work to be able to pay for her school, can focus on her grades. This student still can become a doctor one day despite her rich family. On the other hand, a poor student might not have enough time to study because she has to work to be able to pay for her classes. As a result, this student might give up becoming a doctor.
In addition, conveniences can make every body's life even better and faster to become an independent person. Imagine a mother who has lots of modern kitchen instruments such as meat chopper and fruit mixer. This mother can cook much easier and faster than a woman who has no extra help from expensive kitchen devices. Surely, a rich woman can even be a more successful mother because she will have more time to spend with her children instead of being in the kitchen for long time.
On the contrary, some people may believe that very comfortable and expensive life can be a distraction for young people to become strong which can be true in some cases. For instance, a girl who always has everything she wants may never think that life can be hard sometimes. She may even end up going to parties all times and wasting her time as she grows up. As a result, she may even does not finish her high-school. But, on the other hand, she can use her money in a correct way to become a perfect dentist one day.
As people grows up, they can choose their paths either being rich or poor. With money convenience they can even reach their goals less hard, but it does mean that they cannot be strong people in a same time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a correct way" with adverb for "correct"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...n the other hand, she can use her money in a correct way to become a perfect dentist one day. ...
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Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cannot be strong people in a same time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, well, as to, for instance, in addition, in brief, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in some cases, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40331491713 5.05705443957 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31938281536 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483425414365 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2310332781 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.5555555556 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94444444444 5.21951772744 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0693211602556 0.243740707755 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261887163116 0.0831039109588 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331300037115 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0490341974435 0.150359130593 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221256114366 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 12.1639044944 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.38706741573 81% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 100.480337079 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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