A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter College
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A country’s education system is the backbone which holds its future. The right for education and education curriculum compiled rightfully both are equally important. The national curriculum consists of subjects and courses which children are required to follow plays the most important role in their education. When compiling this national curriculum , the authorities must pay attention to needs of different children and address them differently.
Let’s take a simple example from an imaginary school held at a Jungle. If the Elephant has been offered a subject related to climbing up a tree and a monkey has been offered a subject related to swimming , what will happen to their respective minds? More over if the Fish was taught running instead of swimming what will be the consequence? All three will fail miserably in the subjects they were offered, they’re yet unaware of it, thus they’ll spend their whole life with imagination “I’m dumb”. Let’s substitute animals in this example with minds of children. Different children have diverse interests and skills. A student excels in Mathematics could be interested in art also however he might lack skills to memorize history or geography. In the same way, a student who outshines in Music could not have skills to excel in Science.
Hence the authorities who compiles the national curriculum of a coutry’s education system, must be sensitive to these subtle differences of children, which indeed needs to be treated carefully for all of them to flourish as complete human beings in the future. Different plants need different nutrients to grow, similarly different children needs to give weight on the unique subjects they’re more talented , in order to flourish.
In reality context it’s could be impractical to compose subjects which are unique to every different child. Thus one practical way forward should be to keep essential subjects like Essential languages, Basic Mathamatics, Religion, History , Geography etc in the curriculum however to give lower weight to them during assessments. In that way, the children gain knowledge however their future is not decided upon them. Parallelly the curriculum must have Unique subjects (example Music, Art, Sports, Technology, Computer science) for students to choose from which their unique skills can be nurtured. And they could be directed to their deserving career in long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, similarly, so, thus, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40053050398 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76701174182 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570291777188 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.6172453001 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.157894737 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149159671356 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472068775495 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434426254501 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997894881924 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373928430081 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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