"A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The relevance of a people and her strengths, skills, even including weaknesses finds expression in the rate of productivity, inclusion and deeds, to a common shared purpose of the society, to meet the needs today, and pave way for it's application in the future; In essence, the student who can write effectively, can communicate fluently, even in this unique situation of passing a GRE, is all important when this writer or communicator employs his/her skills somewhere, or this student gets the opportunity to contribute to the Research and Development sector that advances society. The recommendation that all pre college students should have the same curricula exposure can both be seen in alternate perspectives. I mostly disagree with this recommendation for the following two reasons: It impedes diversity in specialization common in the intricacies of a robust and resilient society, as well as the inventiveness of a person, thus makes one limited. I do however concede that there are some positivity in having one curriculum as others from another school of thought propose, but this are still a limited way of ruling a nation sustainably.
Firstly, as earlier stated,the fact that It impedes diversity in specialization common in the intricacies of a robust and resilient society. For a nation to be characterized as successful, it's strengths (people), must contribute both uniquely and harmoniously to the productivity section of the society, such as people who research better infrastructure for the society, or better ways of dealing with businesses as seen in the advent of how uniquely businesses are conducted through technology. Let's take for example, the creation of fast cars, trains, aeroplane for faster transportation. This all started from the basics of understanding the existence and laws of something we refer to as 'Motion', by the then perceived 'different' Isaac Newton. When his mates where being thought the esentialities of the old ways of doing things, Isaac first concieved the concept of Motion from sitting under an orange tree, whose fruit fell on his head. This at the time, was a foreign, and dare I say, crazy and unacceptable concepts, which of course was frowned upon, how much more taught in schools. But today, most of the amenities and infrastructures, used to categorize a society as 'sustainable', successful', 'developed', 'undeveloped', etc are founded on the applications of these principles. On the hand, let us look at the academic background of the movers and shakers of our today society; People, whose share geniusness has shaped the world. Take for example the founder of Microsoft, Steve Jobs. He rise to fame, from the creation of Microsoft, as well as ensuring computers are now handy (easily carried up and down), was in the application of principles different from what his mates, and counterparts where thought in classes, 'the same things'. At the time, dropping out of a prestigious school like Stanford spelled misdirection and lack of understanding to the person, and in essence, ruin. Dare I say however that, as we have seen it's proceeds, it was successful. Critics will however effectively point out that these cases are unique, and not all persons know their way, how much more thriving without direction, which is supplied by what is taught in schools, which again is the same thing. I concede that they are right, especially considering the evident data that only 10% of people who follow different curricula direction actually make it, whilst 56% who follow the same curriculum make it. These are valid stances, but these people fail to see that the recommendation is not about confirmatory success, but the flexibility of studies/curriculum. These data can thus be employed by still having a curriculum for most, but having the flexibility of recognizing geniuses and availing them the unique situations they require in a better acceptable society than it was in times past where they were restricted.
Secondly, the inventiveness of a person, which positively advances a society.4 The reason is, has specifically been highlighted in the advent of the new dawn technological, scientific and engineering have brought about. Technology on it's own has brought about both ease and unprecedented complexities, whose solutions lie beyond the confines of the same old ways being taught to everyone. Let's take for example the unfortunate story of the boy invented the door stopper. This boy was rumored to have seen and suffered the death of his sister, who was caught in a closing door as she was making an attempt to pass through whilst crawling, and died. The boy, then thought of a way to ensure the rate at which a door closes could be controlled better. Though this seems like a situation that could have been discussed in class, but the discussion won't have been brought to life because there was no trigger. At the time, this methodology was beyond the school curriculum of that society. Now, imagine if the boy had just stopped within the confines of what was taught, heights that was defined for high schoolers in class. Perhaps, this invention would have taken longer time to come into existence, or not at all. Let's also consider the father of the Oil and Gas Industry, Rockefeller. His adventures in the industry paved way for the characterization of business expansion as Horizontal and vertical. Rockefeller, who is universally considered the father of the Oil and Gas industry, understanding the nuances of business. Specifically, when interviews, he credited his shrewdness to the crafty illegal deals he often saw his engaged in. His father was a an infamous con man. This is, if anything, the negative extreme of knowlegde, which most definitely can't be taught in schools, much less approved for a standardized curriculum, but in it, Rockefeller understood what to do, and this brought about the expansion of oil business to unprecedented levels, making oil and most sort after commodity for large energy resources. Some are however of the opinion that these principles, employed by the boy inventor, and Rockefeller have their origin in the unified curriculum, hence, it's expressions in this ways should be credited to harmonious teaching. If that were so, all those who were mates of these two examples would have been famous in their respective era. Take for example Rockefeller, it was published in the Young Johns journal that 'amongst all who were taught by the same teacher in his class, and his time, he was the most famous, and most deterministic as regards the economic influences of the society. From Rockefeller, companies such as Shell, Chevron, which are classified as the IOC's that determine the oil direction, and what matters, came to be.
In conclusion, we see that uniform teaching pre-college is not necessarily agreed as bad, thus should not be eliminated, rather, it is a situation of flexibility and insights in a society. We do not want a situation where redundancy is the order of the day, and a section of persons who are made for more fall into it, but rather, these exceptionalities should be recognized, accepted and accounted for uniquely. A balanced curriculum should cater for the larger students in it's dictatorship, but also account for the genius students, as well as instances, as these are the moment, and people that shape the society futuristically speaking.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...both be seen in alternate perspectives. I mostly disagree with this recommendatio...
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...he founder of Microsoft, Steve Jobs. He rise to fame, from the creation of Microsoft...
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...schools, which again is the same thing. I concede that they are right, especially...
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... to come into existence, or not at all. Lets also consider the father of the Oil and...
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Suggestion: a; an
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eme of knowlegde, which most definitely cant be taught in schools, much less approve...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...d curriculum, hence, its expressions in this ways should be credited to harmonious t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, as regards, for example, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 57.0 19.5258426966 292% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 48.0 14.8657303371 323% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 44.0 11.3162921348 389% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 94.0 33.0505617978 284% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 152.0 58.6224719101 259% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 6168.0 2235.4752809 276% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 1206.0 442.535393258 273% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1144278607 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.89300523573 4.55969084622 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03883594456 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 538.0 215.323595506 250% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446102819237 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1922.4 704.065955056 273% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 6.24550561798 384% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 25.0 1.77640449438 1407% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 42.0 20.2370786517 208% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.0559448591 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.857142857 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181330850883 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412074425798 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346847298238 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124730640327 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187289805716 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 292.0 100.480337079 291% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.8971910112 248% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 718, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...both be seen in alternate perspectives. I mostly disagree with this recommendatio...
^
Line 1, column 958, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...ss of a person, thus makes one limited. I do however concede that there are some ...
^
Line 1, column 984, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[5]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'there are some positivities'?
Suggestion: there are some positivities
... one limited. I do however concede that there are some positivity in having one curriculum as others from...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: ,
...stainably. Firstly, as earlier stated,the fact that It impedes diversity in sp...
^
Line 3, column 495, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...esses are conducted through technology. Lets take for example, the creation of fast ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 982, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...is at the time, was a foreign, and dare I say, crazy and unacceptable concepts, w...
^
Line 3, column 1492, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'rises'.
Suggestion: rises
...he founder of Microsoft, Steve Jobs. He rise to fame, from the creation of Microsoft...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1891, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
... the person, and in essence, ruin. Dare I say however that, as we have seen its p...
^
Line 3, column 2189, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
...schools, which again is the same thing. I concede that they are right, especially...
^
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...same old ways being taught to everyone. Lets take for example the unfortunate story ...
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Line 5, column 1213, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... to come into existence, or not at all. Lets also consider the father of the Oil and...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1653, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ften saw his engaged in. His father was a an infamous con man. This is, if anythi...
^
Line 5, column 1653, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...ften saw his engaged in. His father was a an infamous con man. This is, if anything,...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1755, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eme of knowlegde, which most definitely cant be taught in schools, much less approve...
^^^^
Line 5, column 2197, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...d curriculum, hence, its expressions in this ways should be credited to harmonious t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, as regards, for example, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 57.0 19.5258426966 292% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 48.0 14.8657303371 323% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 44.0 11.3162921348 389% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 94.0 33.0505617978 284% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 152.0 58.6224719101 259% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 6168.0 2235.4752809 276% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 1206.0 442.535393258 273% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1144278607 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.89300523573 4.55969084622 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03883594456 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 538.0 215.323595506 250% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446102819237 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1922.4 704.065955056 273% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 6.24550561798 384% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 25.0 1.77640449438 1407% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 42.0 20.2370786517 208% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.0559448591 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.857142857 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181330850883 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412074425798 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346847298238 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124730640327 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187289805716 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 292.0 100.480337079 291% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.8971910112 248% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.