Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning f

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Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Sometime, many critics to government actions believe that financial budgets allocated to art things are unnecessary and it would be better if this amount of money would spend on presenting food to the starving people or establishing structures to decrease the rate of unemployment. However I totally disagree with this idea because of three important reasons.
first of all, the subject related to arts, such as movies, theaters, museums, plays, painting,and etc are related to our historical culture and as all of us know many experts and enthusiasts to these fields are working in the society and make money. Now consider the situation that the government snuffs out the amount of required money for maintaining the museums or cinemas. As result of this action,many occupations would be closed and the rate of unemployment would increase consequently.
Secondly, if the issue is related to significant people who do not have a job or income, as the prompt has mentioned, I do not think that the funding art subjects are the fundamental reason for this problem. For instance, when 24 million of 45million people are unemployed, definitely, the other fields are suffering in supplying adequate job vacancies. In my country, the rate of unemployment has soared since intense interdiction put on trading with other country. Subsequently, the rate of internal production has decreased and therefore there is no blame on the money spent on art subjects.
At last, if we want to consider this prompt historically, in the era of the monarchy, there was not any specific process to allocate budget to various part of the society and still there were many people who were suffering from hunger and inadequate equipment to deal with disease. I want to say that, if a specific amount of money does not spent on the art, it would not necessarily spend on issues related to human being 's basic issues such as food of having a job.As the above example illustrate that many kings and royal fellows use the money for having more fun and preparing imposing castle for themselves. In some cases, many of riches do not pay their taxes due to their close relationships with kings and quins. It is not actually weird in our time too. Since many business and political men abuse their power and escape from tax payment which could be very useful for solving monetary problems.
To sum up,I definitely do not agree with the cutting of the money which is required for the subjects pertinent to art since many people are active in different branches of this field and we would not like to add them to unemployed ones.Furthermore, the issues mentioned in prompt is more fundamental than the permissive solution suggested and history proved the opposite of this point of view.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, such as, first of all, in some cases, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95032397408 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79421046238 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5313174946 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.8164628659 60.3974514979 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.8 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8666666667 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9333333333 5.21951772744 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133929564332 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463320190302 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307993784508 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771151978082 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281907342282 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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