The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
By citing the observations of the store owners in the Plaza and the increasing popularity of the skateboarding, this argument argues that skateboarding should be prohibited in the Plaza because not only it causes decline in the business, but it also causes increased levels or incidences of violence and increased amount of litter in the plaza. The author predicts improvement in the business upon implementation of the argument above. It might seem laudable. Close study/scrutiny, however, reveals that the argument is problematic unless the author provides us with additional amount of evidence.
First, the author failed to present a clear connection between the increased popularity of skateboarding and the decline in the number of shoppers at the Plaza during the past 2 years. In fact, an important question arises here, how does skateboarding affect shopping? We don’t know! It could be the case that increased number of skateboard users caused over crowdedness in the Plaza which might have precluded shoppers from moving freely in the store. Or maybe numerous repeated incidences of crashes between skateboard users and shoppers have happened which gave the place the reputation of inconvenience. If this turns to be the case, then the claim of the author is true and therefore improvements of the business would be expected after the prohibition of the skateboarding at the Plaza. But this remains uncertain until the author provides more details on the connection stated.
It is predicted to assume that there could be other explanations for the decline in business. What about the stores at Plaza themselves? Isn't it possible that the problem is in the stores themselves? For example, the products, goods, services are outdated or overpriced. There could be a new Plaza in the area that have better prices and services compared to the stores at the Central plaza which have attracted the shoppers. In this case, prohibiting skateboarding at the Plaza wouldn't yield in increase of profits. The fact that the author hasn't make a mention of this cause, doesn't eliminate its possibility.
Additionally, the author states that an increase in the amount of litter and vandalism was noticed. He didn't provide a clear connection between skateboarders and increased litter and vandalism. However, Wouldn’t it be wiser to start a cleaning campaign in the Plaza in the first place instead of prohibiting skateboarding? Because we might find that the root cause of the problem is the increased amount of litter and chaos which discourage shoppers to shop at the Central Plaza.
In sum, the author needs to provide more information on the connection between skateboarding and decline in business, whether this is the root cause of the problem and the connection between skateboard users and increased chaos and violence in the Plaza. Otherwise his argument wouldn't persuade the city state and therefore the prohibition of skateboarding will not be implemented.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, in fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3310.0 2235.4752809 148% => OK
No of words: 627.0 442.535393258 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27910685805 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00399520894 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02240219072 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.409888357257 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1023.3 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0155220886 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.333333333 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422527531462 0.243740707755 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122058092412 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165271915852 0.0758088955206 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209800547602 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.200296052038 0.0667264976115 300% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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