As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The newly developing technology is shaping the world in a dramatic way. The trends of implications and affects, the technology is making are quite game changing. The author asserts the notion that technology brings deterioration in the human's ability to think and work properly is not agreeable to much extent. However, it might impact a segment of individuals that are relying on it or abusing it.
Techonology can be used to remove the menial tasks from our day to day lives and provide more time for the human being to channalize his/her cognitive abilities to a better function. As human beings are known for their intelligence and problem solving approach, one can focus on the more compelling questions and collectively contribute the development of ourself or a group. For instance, the works that are repeatative and menial do not require people to be sparing their time, rather the machines can perform these jobs better than us. Take the case of a packaging a material at a factory instead of involving tens of people to do the job which might not even be as homogenous as one would expect, a machine with a little program will do the job much faster and with uniformity. This ensures the people to perform more meaningful jobs like working on the programming of the machines or discussions to improve the production capability of the supply chain. This would significantly ensure the congnitive abilities of the people intact with machines by their sides to free up some time for these recurring activities.
It would also make sense if the calculations and data storage capabilities of the machines are relied upon rather than the human beings as with the advancement in technology machines can handle much much advanced calculations and store large quantities of data. Nowadays, everything is becoming IoT as we require require monitoring and access of every device at the tip of our hands. With this IoT revolution, there has been a large amount of data collection. Take an example of a car company like Tesla, it is data dependent company, for every mile the car rides significant amout of data is collect from the LIDAR, RADAR, GPS systems to accustom the rider and provide autonomous car-driving experience. While large chunks of data is being collected it is majorly meaningless without someone to clean and crunch the data. That's where humans role come into play, we can let the technology handle the storage of this huge amount of data and we can work on making sense of this collected data for it to be useful and can be applied to the car's input on further rides. From the above case presented we can clearly see that the technology can make our lives easier to harness our true potential by focusing our attention to where it belongs.
In conclusion, we can make the best and worst use of the technology based on the actions one performs with it, remember it is created by us only to make our lives easier and better but it depends on the usage of an individual to abuse or make better use of it. For example, an excessive usage of the calculator might hamper the person's ability to respond to the minor mental calculus which could have been done easily.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a dramatic way" with adverb for "dramatic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...eloping technology is shaping the world in a dramatic way. The trends of implications and affects...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...logy is making are quite game changing. The author asserts the notion that technolo...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
... technology brings deterioration in the humans ability to think and work properly is n...
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Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...hink and work properly is not agreeable to much extent. However, it might impact a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: much
...ement in technology machines can handle much much advanced calculations and store large q...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: require
...adays, everything is becoming IoT as we require require monitoring and access of every device a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...t someone to clean and crunch the data. Thats where humans role come into play, we ca...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...sage of the calculator might hamper the persons ability to respond to the minor mental ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2632.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 549.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7941712204 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67526136434 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486338797814 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 868.5 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0977600906 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.526315789 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8947368421 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186224589789 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061015120202 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452194497457 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114994388089 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556014736235 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.