Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The statement mentions that some people believe that technology takes our chances to interact with others while other people believe that technology can make more connection between people. I agree that technology renovation provides unlimited communication ways between people.
First, technology brings many opportunities to everybody to make connections to the whole world. Imagine a girl who lives and works in Los Angeles, but her whole family members live in Arizona. She is able to keep connection with her family by using easy and fast communication ways such as internet or flight. For example, if she is not busy, she can easily take a plan only for few hours to see her parents or if she is busy, she can use FaceTime to see her family and talk to them, which is an easier way than booking a flight. In addition, this girl can send her photos or voice to her family at any time by using email or Facebook.
Additionally, people are capable to use modernization to have easier connections in a professional world. Consider a Dietitian who lives in Sacramento, but she is looking for a job in a nursing home in Orange County. She might not be able to go to the multiple job interviews in Orange County because of time and money consuming, but with technology like Zoom, she has an opportunity to talk to the manager for a job interview. This Dietitian can even search online for her favorite place to live and have a FaceTime with her new roommate to see the place.
On the contrary, some people believe that technology revolutions are reducing children or young people’s contacts with others, which can be true sometimes. However, even in these cases there are ways to make connections conceivable. For instance, ten years old boy who is interested to play video games will not have enough chance to interact to his family, his classmates, or even his friends. However, this boy’s parent can invite their son’s friends to their home to interact with each other and play video games at the same time. As another option to make connection with their boy is to ask him to talk about his favorite video games or go to online playing centers and have family dinner outside after that.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77165354331 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64837850287 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501312335958 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5107296394 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.625 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8125 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301567121319 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105051111321 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104336081991 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210664759553 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126562733212 0.0667264976115 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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