Ability to relate things and connect with other people is one of the unique capacity of human being. It is our voluminous brain that fortifies us with this superpower and this superpower is one among various differences that allows human being to rule this planet we call home. It is still a matter of debate whether this capacity is developed by travelling and living in different places or by living in a single place, performing deep study of the community. Though living in same place and performing deep study seems convincincing way of understanding our community, it is travel and interaction with different communities that bolsters our abilities to connect to other people. This is obvious for following reasons:
First and foremost, understanding variable values, norms and morals allows travellers to connect with new people faster. Travelling and living in multiple places allows us to come in contact with various people. These people have unique norms, values, morals and ways of life, which separates their community from neighbouring societies. Being able to understand and analyze these differences empowers traveller to easily understand needs, interests and views of next community, sometimes even before talking to them. And, understanding each other is the very first step to relating and connecting to other people. Thus, travellers take comparitively less time to connect with new people.
Further, Travellers are better adapted to changed environment compared to residents. Travellers have lived in variety of conditions during their travel. They have lived from clean to dirty, cold to warm, humid to dry and comfortable to less comfortable environments during their journey. They have spent many nights without a penny and spent other nights spending thousands of dollars. This variable lifestyle and living environment renders travellers with unique ability to adapt easily to changed environment, and as we know, everyone is connected to those who are easily adapted to their environment, allowing travellers to better connect with various people.
While it seems that deeper study helps us understand variation inside the communities and better understand it, Being closer to large number people is what drives us towards understanding of variation among and between communities. This understanding is the way one person is connected to another. Thus, for abovementioned reasons, travelling and living in multiple places is supporting to relating and connecting ability.
- Claim No act is done purely for the benefit of others Reason All actions even those that seem to be done for other people are based on self interest 50
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- The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses Last year however all of the five 70
- The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers artists or scientists but by the general welfare of its people Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement a 54
- The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago Furthermore there has been 59
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 692, Rule ID: OBVIOUS_FOR[1]
Message: The adjective obvious is normally used with 'to': 'obvious to following'.
Suggestion: obvious to following
...ies to connect to other people. This is obvious for following reasons: First and foremost, understa...
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Line 1, column 722, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, still, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50649350649 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89924819121 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480519480519 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2109716838 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.777777778 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3888888889 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 5.21951772744 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379344483294 0.243740707755 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128938443051 0.0831039109588 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781261487429 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23939252988 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767282847242 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.