Every year, thousands of bicyclists travel to the Tibetan mountainous area to bike up the mountains. While it is a sacrosanct pilgrimage to see the Tibetan god, the journey is not light at all: the high altitude and the underdeveloped roads make it almost impossible for people to travel there alone. Therefore, a lot of people have made connections along the way, helping each other out and finally establishing organizations to help enthusiastic bicyclists bike up the mountain. Looking back at these people before they came to bike, I can't imagine a group of city-dwelling people who are satisfied with staying in one place can connect with so many others, since they have a routine schedule that prevents them to meet different people.
Traveling requires people to develop interpersonal connections because of the challenges and discomfort it brings. Traveling means going to an unfamiliar place, where unexpected difficulties will surely occur. Ranging from currency exchange to flight delays, travelers need to tackle countless challenges that they will not experience in their quotidian, regular lives. The pressure brought by a strange place during traveling can prompt travelers to take a step in talking with others, asking for help and company. In contrast, in their natural habitat, they feel too comfortable to make any extra connections. The limited time during travels also further hones people's connection skills, having to articulate their thoughts within a short conversation. Moreover, traveling also teaches people to maintain relationships even across a long distance. A lot of friends that people make might show up again in a long time due to the long distance. However, travelers can learn to cherish long-distance friendships after travels with these new people that they have met. Marco Paolo, an Italian anthropologist, made connections with local people in China when he traveled here, because he was a stranger to the place and needed assistance. That's why his documents of China can be so detailed, attracting more Westerners to explore the East.
Traveling also brings people more opportunities and a more uplifting mood to connect with others. People travel because of their curiosity about the outside world, and therefore, they will naturally want to learn more about the local culture when they travel. That's what prompts them to make connections with others from diverse backgrounds. Also, most people travel because they want to relax, or at least inject some different colors into their monochromatic lives. Thus, they will generally have a more positive and fulfilling mood to embrace conversations with others.
Finally, traveling pushes travelers to communicate with very different people, honing their understanding and empathetic skills. Travel destinations usually have distinct traditions from where travelers come from. Therefore, travelers must learn how they can adapt their communication skills to a broader variety of people. For example, Western travelers will need to learn a different, stricter set of social manners when they travel to Japan, and conversely, Japanese locals will also need to understand cultural differences and tolerate people from other countries even if they can't fully carry out Japanese social norms. Travelers will also learn to overcome language barriers, using more diverse kinds of ways to communicate with people, including drawing and body language. Before they return to their homes, travelers will have learned a cornucopia of communicative methods.
Admittedly, developing a deep understanding of one's own community also helps people make connections, as they can talk about more profound subjects with people from the same community. However, I believe the interpersonal connection skill comes from communicating with more different people instead of a fixed group of people. Diverse communication incites more innovative thinking and helps people develop empathy, which both become more relevant in today's world of globalization, where opportunities pop up everywhere across the globe. Limiting oneself to communication within a single community will only deepen people's biases and make our world more polarized, just as how both parties of the United States become more extreme due to their lack of mobilization.
In conclusion, traveling grants people more advanced skills of communication because it provides challenges, curiosity, opportunities, and diversity. While people can have heartfelt relationships with those from their own community as well, they can only learn more complex and comprehensive social skills through traveling.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 539, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hese people before they came to bike, I cant imagine a group of city-dwelling people...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1236, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ger to the place and needed assistance. Thats why his documents of China can be so de...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...out the local culture when they travel. Thats what prompts them to make connections w...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 582, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eople from other countries even if they cant fully carry out Japanese social norms. ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 109.0 58.6224719101 186% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3927.0 2235.4752809 176% => OK
No of words: 706.0 442.535393258 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56232294618 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1546736571 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96171573003 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 361.0 215.323595506 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511331444759 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 1224.0 704.065955056 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0870571585 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.71875 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34375 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199292901842 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632963423765 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404315883211 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117892901574 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352461378427 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 192.0 100.480337079 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 539, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hese people before they came to bike, I cant imagine a group of city-dwelling people...
^^^^
Line 2, column 1236, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ger to the place and needed assistance. Thats why his documents of China can be so de...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...out the local culture when they travel. Thats what prompts them to make connections w...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 582, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eople from other countries even if they cant fully carry out Japanese social norms. ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 109.0 58.6224719101 186% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3927.0 2235.4752809 176% => OK
No of words: 706.0 442.535393258 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56232294618 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1546736571 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96171573003 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 361.0 215.323595506 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511331444759 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 1224.0 704.065955056 174% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0870571585 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.71875 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0625 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34375 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199292901842 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632963423765 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404315883211 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117892901574 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352461378427 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 192.0 100.480337079 191% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.