Being successful in life has a variety of meanings ranges from achieving your dream goal to being happy in your life with a 9-5 job, or sometimes just being happy and in a peaceful state of mind. The thesis here suggests that trus success can be measured primarily in terms of the goals one achieved for themselves. I have a partial disagreement with the claim. I believe achieving their goals can be one of the factor to measure true success but there are multiple other factors like mental and physical happiness that should have more contribution.
Work hard and achieve your goals, you will finally be successful in your life. This phrase has become a banal motivation speech for many people. Consider an example of a student in a university, with a dream of working in a software company like Google in this competitive world, he is studying day and night with arduous efforts. Let's say after getting a job in Google, he now have a life somewhere in outskirts and contributing most of his time living alone and just working 8 hours a day. Can this be counted as a successful individual? I believe, one's goals and achievement does not only accounts for one's true success. The life afterwards and the impact of the achievement within the lifestyle of an individual does. Relying just on achieveving goals may give short term satisfaction but may have a opposite impact on a holistic picture.
However, having a lifestyle where one is living a decent life with his family along with proper work-life balance, ocassional vacations, etc., counts more on a healthy living and denotes true success. Consider the life of a normal 9-5 job person who has a wife and two kids. If considering success definition based on having a lifestyle where you can have mental and physical happiness along with considerate satisfaction in your life, which in my opinion is, one can definitely say that the person, if living his life with a proper balance would be more successful. Also, the success of this individual not only makes him satisfied but alo to his family which adds up a more holistic view of true success.
On a summary note, I believe achieveing some bigger goals will lead to happiness but that might be ephemeral and have an contrary outcome later. One needs to have a balance of their own goals along with the satisfaction of better future, not individually but with family and friends. Achieving physical and mental hapiness along with your goals and a good forseen future considering family and a happy-ever-after life can summarise true success in a better way.
- The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them not by their contemporaries 83
- Government should offer college and university education free of charge to all students Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In develop 66
- We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whoseviews contradict our own 58
- True success can be measured primarily in terms of the goals one sets for oneself 50
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ariety of meanings ranges from achieving your dream goal to being happy in your l...
^^
Line 2, column 332, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ing day and night with arduous efforts. Lets say after getting a job in Google, he n...
^^^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...y after getting a job in Google, he now have a life somewhere in outskirts and contr...
^^^^
Line 2, column 552, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... as a successful individual? I believe, ones goals and achievement does not only acc...
^^^^
Line 2, column 593, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'account'
Suggestion: account
...nes goals and achievement does not only accounts for ones true success. The life afterwa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 803, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ve short term satisfaction but may have a opposite impact on a holistic picture. ...
^
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ss but that might be ephemeral and have an contrary outcome later. One needs to ha...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81221719457 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72124172545 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486425339367 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7852594277 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.947368421 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314259373457 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119739641679 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128429880947 0.0758088955206 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22621874165 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106788252433 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ariety of meanings ranges from achieving your dream goal to being happy in your l...
^^
Line 2, column 332, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ing day and night with arduous efforts. Lets say after getting a job in Google, he n...
^^^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...y after getting a job in Google, he now have a life somewhere in outskirts and contr...
^^^^
Line 2, column 552, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... as a successful individual? I believe, ones goals and achievement does not only acc...
^^^^
Line 2, column 593, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'account'
Suggestion: account
...nes goals and achievement does not only accounts for ones true success. The life afterwa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 803, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ve short term satisfaction but may have a opposite impact on a holistic picture. ...
^
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ss but that might be ephemeral and have an contrary outcome later. One needs to ha...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81221719457 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72124172545 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486425339367 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7852594277 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.947368421 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89473684211 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314259373457 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119739641679 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128429880947 0.0758088955206 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22621874165 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106788252433 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.