Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing
and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the
recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples
shape your position.
The advancements in communication technologies in the last three decades have led to more conducive information flow and consequently sparked the growth of an interconnected, globalized society. In order to keep up with this paradigm shift, there has been a rising emphasis on the inclusion of more diverse courses in student curricula across all levels of formal education. The prompt suggests that universities mandate the inclusion of courses outside a student's field of study. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that students should consider taking up courses that challenge them to explore beyond their domain of interest for two reasons.
The emergence of cosmopolitan trends has stimulated a radical change in current societies, which requires a shift to a more liberal outlook regarding various social and economic factors on the part of its people. An exposure to various subjects like arts, literature and finance via college courses enhances the student's understanding of different facets of society and helps to broaden her perspective, allowing her to have an informed opinion regarding various societal factors. For instance, a student majoring in computer science and specializing in artificial intelligence may be tempted to avoid taking up courses related to humanities since they are seemingly unrelated to her interests. However, the recent AI boom and the rising concerns of machine learning models being used for nefarious purposes seem to suggest that students looking to pursue a career in AI must be educated regarding the ethical implications of their work and how it might possibly affect the masses in general. A professional well-versed in both the technical and ethical aspects of her domain would be able to solve pressing technical problems without compromising on the safety concerns, benefiting all parties concerned. That being said, would the recent concerns regarding AI "going rogue" and ending humanity be mollified to some extent if the makers of these technologies strive to create products that are "by the people, for the people"? The general public opinion seems to suggest so.
Taking up courses from other specializations also acts a strong impetus for students to study and perhaps master a seemingly important, but "boring" topic that they would otherwise never be bothered to explore, and hence miss out. For instance, a student majoring in fine arts might hugely benefit from taking up a course in finance, as even a fear of not doing well in the exams would compel her to go through the subject material in depth, and perhaps even retain some of this acquired knowledge for life. This would possibly benefit her in the future, when she might face the decision of investing her savings in high-risk, high-return stocks or less-risk, more stable mutual funds.
A possible point against these arguments might be the fact that taking up unrelated courses leads to a diversion of effort into "unnecessary" channels, which could instead have been used to improve a student's proficiency in her field of interest. However, such a desired proficiency can also be achieved by putting in extra effort along with the courses in which the student majors, with relatively lesser effort than later investing that time to learn an important but unrelated field of study, without the necessary stimulus. Students who put in a sincere effort to take up and master courses which are outside their comfort zone often develop into well-rounded, skilled and empathetic professionals who can drive a country's quantitative progress without harming the interests of its people.
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- Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student s field of study Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 949, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'might', 'possibly'.
Suggestion: might; possibly
...l implications of their work and how it might possibly affect the masses in general. A profess...
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Line 3, column 949, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'might'.
Suggestion: might
...l implications of their work and how it might possibly affect the masses in general. A profess...
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Line 3, column 1453, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...y the people, for the people'? The general public opinion seems to suggest so. Taking ...
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Line 7, column 211, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...uld instead have been used to improve a students proficiency in her field of interest. H...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, well, for instance, in general, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 101.0 58.6224719101 172% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3102.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 578.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36678200692 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99792195842 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 318.0 215.323595506 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550173010381 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 963.0 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.7820969346 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.470588235 118.986275619 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.0 23.4991977007 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210374633035 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739476696909 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580614045844 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138112880412 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441272614716 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.9 14.1392134831 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.1743820225 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 168.0 100.480337079 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.