While some leaders in government, sports, industry, and other areas attribute their success to a well-developed sense of competition, a society can better prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation
The issue asserts that to prepare its juveniles for leadership in several fields in our society, cooperation should be more prioritized than competition. Some might argue that the competition will increase individial's leadership than cooperation, because it is obvious that some level of competition is effective in enhancing individual's ability. However, as the world becomes more complicated, learning to cooperate becomes more essential than competition. Therefore, I agree with the statement.
Admittedly, it is obvious that some level of competition will make each individual's ability better. For example, in sports, players compete with each other to gain honor by winning a tornament or a gold medal. Moreover, many people will agree that competition in school for academic achievements can be one of the motivation to study. These cases show that some level of competition will enhance the individual's ability, and this can surely enhance young people's leadership. Furthermore, competing on a certain group for certain goal will be helpful in gaining leadership.
However, making teenagers compete each other might be deleterious when they grow up. This might stress each individual for achieving specific goals. This high level of stress might be harming in that age. Moreover, overheated competition might ruin other important aspects in life such as love and cooperation. They would focus on goals right infront of them and discard anything else. This kind of possible situation will surely harm each young people's leadership.
On the contrary, the world today requires cooperation than competition. As the world become more complex, it became almost impossible for each individual to work on their own. For example, in the fields of robotic engineering, scientists from mechanic engineering, electric engineering, and computer science engineering should cooperate to reach the specific goal they desire. Moreover, most of the present outstanding achievments were made by groups not individuals. Alpha Go, an artificial intelligence that beat the world champion on the game go, was made by some groups in google. Furthermore, Argentina won the World Cup by working together as a team.
In conclusion, I agree to the issue. Some might argue that competition is needed to increase each individual's ability. However, the world now values more on cooperation rather than competition. Therefore, it is necessary to make young people instill cooperation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 73, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ome level of competition will make each individuals ability better. For example, in sports,...
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Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...e level of competition will enhance the individuals ability, and this can surely enhance yo...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... competition is needed to increase each individuals ability. However, the world now values ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55319148936 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01045033621 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.105141815 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.52 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.04 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189026772221 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524683149786 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428245834483 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111877074486 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393631145592 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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