Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Our goals are often what define us and our happiness, and motivate us to achieve greater things in life. The youth are the pillars of the society and they should be encouraged to pursue practical aspirations, logical goals rather than mindlessly chasing ostentatious goals. I strongly agree with this statement for two reasons.
Young people can often get carried away in chasing fame. They get bedazzled by the thoughts of how their life might change if they get famous and this often becomes their driving force. Though this might lead to short-term satisfaction, fame is rather illusive. For example a young highschooler might start hanging out with the popular kids to become "cool". This might lead to them smoking, taking drugs, consuming alcohol and so on just to fit in. However, all this is sure to take a toll on their physical and mental well-being and might result in digressing their vulnerable minds from focussing on building a career from themselves. Thus, in an attempt to be popular social butterflies, bright young students might see their grades fall and lose their chances of getting into college, ultimately compromising on their careers.
Further, becoming obsessed with the idea of fame and recognition can often lead one to shy away from putting in real efforts toward something practical. People tend to adopt short-cuts to achieve their goals rather than investing in a long-term hobby or skill which would help in building careers to sustain them financially. For instance, today's youth spend a lot of time and energy to upload their work on social media to flaunt, rather than introspecting and getting feedback from critics or experts who can provide meaningful insights to better their work. Thus, while social media can get likes and lot of followers, it would not help one upskill oneself and master one's work.
Moreover, it should be noted that cultivating a realistic goal can ensure one's long-term mental peace. One can truly be happy when one is pursuing something that interests and intrigues them, instead of following the trend and forcefully taking up something which is in fashion. For example, young girls and boys often aspire to become models or influencers simply because the youth belive it to be "vogue". If they could utilise this time to learn a new practical skill, they could actually build a career out of it. Once this trend becomes obsolete, these vivacious young minds will lose out on promising career opportunities because they spent vital days of their youth to blindly follow the throng.
Some might argue that fame brings money and satisfaction, however it is only hard work and honest efforts that can truly make a person sucessful. Success is not solely depend on how rich or famous a person it is. Success is a state of mind that can be achieved when one wholeheartedly and diligently pursues a goal that would interest them in the long-term, instead of giving in to temptations of becoming popular.
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the pos 79
- Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the pos 79
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...hieve greater things in life. The youth are the pillars of the society and they sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2503.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 495.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05656565657 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70196261621 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529292929293 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6659086229 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.772727273 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178922444435 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590671511176 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545764520914 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109212342014 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372577236291 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.