Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. As our generation is more like to spend time on the internet wasting a lot of their precious time. They need to channelize their energy in the right direction. for that they need guidance from the previous generation or from schools and colleges where thay will learn multiple topics. about our past and beware of our future.
Young people spend more time on the Internet and they also have a proper idea of what our feature would/can be. So its prefferd that they should be engouraged to persue long-term goals as that will help them in the early stages of life to take decissions depending of there future vission. Whereas as they are open to internet, it tends to happen thay they try to do small things such as, free lancing, video editing, etc online. Which is good for short term income but insted they forget to utilize there time and waste a chunk of it doing these kind of things online, and without realizing it they waste ther precious time. However, if they are aware of time they will utilize there time insted of wasting it. They will do stuf that will help them in longrun to grow.
As young people has time to multiple new things, and if they want the can stick with some thing that they like.It will help them to figure out what they want to do, what there ocupetions are wnat they enjoy doing such as hobbies, etc. However they cant spent all of there time searching for what they wnt to do. they also need to focous on there studies, that are tought in schools and colleges, thus they will have a guideline through which they will get a realistic idea of what are the need of our socity. Through which they will have an Idea of the ballance that our socity/ environment needs.
If these young generation starts to utilize there time in a wise manner they can achieve lots of things in life, as these enerations are exposed to the internet they can learn whatever they want which will indeed help them to grow or make them knowledgable. They just need to chanelize there energy and put efforts in the right directions.As we know in this 21st century we have social media where billions of billions of peoples are there active. So it verry easy to spent a ton of time and put energy in the wrong direction by surfing internet. On the other hand there are tons of educative channels , groups, blogs which helps us to gain some knowledge through it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...an seek immediate fame and recognition. As our generation is more like to spend ti...
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Suggestion: For
...ze their energy in the right direction. for that they need guidance from the previo...
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Suggestion: About
... where thay will learn multiple topics. about our past and beware of our future. ...
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Message: Did you mean 'freelancing'?
Suggestion: freelancing
...ay they try to do small things such as, free lancing, video editing, etc online. Which is go...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...here time and waste a chunk of it doing these kind of things online, and without realizing...
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Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...gs, and if they want the can stick with some thing that they like.It will help them to fig...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...an stick with some thing that they like.It will help them to figure out what they ...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...oing such as hobbies, etc. However they cant spent all of there time searching for w...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a wise manner" with adverb for "wise"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...generation starts to utilize there time in a wise manner they can achieve lots of things in life...
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Suggestion: As
...and put efforts in the right directions.As we know in this 21st century we have so...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and put efforts in the right directions.As we know in this 21st century we have so...
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'billions of'.
Suggestion: billions of
...21st century we have social media where billions of billions of peoples are there active. So it verry e...
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Suggestion: ,
...and there are tons of educative channels , groups, blogs which helps us to gain so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, whereas, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56919642857 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22152960229 2.79657885939 79% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482142857143 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2601470174 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.736842105 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5789473684 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110371482081 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513923157737 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10384589454 0.0758088955206 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894336116432 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548514662704 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.