The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005

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The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005.

The bar chart reveals the number of student who chose certain university subject in 2005. There are various subjects like Sciences, Mathematics, Social Sciences, Languages, Humanities, The Arts (Art, Music, Drama), Literature, and Law. In general, the most popular subject among female studenst is Social Sciences (almost 25 thousand) and for male students is Sciences (a little over 20 thousand). Interestingly, subjects such as Mathematics, Literature, Law are acttractive to the boys with over 40 thousand students but for girls might be boring since there are less than 25 thousand students chose those to study. In contrast, the number of choice for Languages as well as The Art in female students is approximately 27 thousand and in male it is poorly low (less than 5 thousand). However there is a subject that the rate of both students are equally and it is Humanities with slightly over 10 thousand each. In summary, the chart have clearly showed us the disparity between male and female in choosing university subject.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 1, column 783, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, well, in contrast, in general, in summary, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 853.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10778443114 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79441260336 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586826347305 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3544159712 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 5.23603664747 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324847007892 0.215688989381 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191500153813 0.103423049105 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.242241280722 0.0843802449381 287% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324847007892 0.15604864568 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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