The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005

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The bar chart below shows the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005

The bar chart below the number of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005. Overall, the number of students choosing majors is very diverse. In which, those subjects such as Social sciences, Language and The Arts attract more female students than male students. In detail, the Social Sciences subject was chosen highly by female students (approximately 25,000 people, while male students only accounted for about 15,000 people). Besides, Language subject is equally high. The number of female students choosing this subject is outstandingly high (nearly 18,000 people, compared with nearly 2 thousand male students). On the other hand, for male students, the selection focuses mainly on subjects such as Sciences, Mathematics, Litterateur and Law. With over 20,000 people, Sciences has the highest number of male students in the subjects chosen by male students, while female students in this subject only account for about 10,000 people. Next is Mathematics. This subject also has more males than females. and even the other two subjects, Litterateur and Law, the same goes for when the number of male students selected for the two subjects is 15,000 and 10,000 respectively. Meanwhile, female students in this subject group are quite low. Only now did I realize that perhaps male students like intellectual thinking more than female students, while female students prefer social activities as well as art, so there is a division as shown in the diagram. this. However, quite special, the Humanities subject attracts the same number of male and female students with the number reaching over 10 thousand people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1027, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ject also has more males than females. and even the other two subjects, Litterateu...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...is a division as shown in the diagram. this. However, quite special, the Humanitie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, so, well, while, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 965.302439024 142% => OK
No of words: 256.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3359375 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52728035566 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48828125 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 398.7 283.868780488 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.5353547448 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5714285714 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294388524971 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146178196644 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.218336525618 0.0843802449381 259% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294388524971 0.15604864568 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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