the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

This chart demonstrates the figure for people who take exercise in Australia in 2010.

It is obvious that female citizens were more active in most age groups except the group of 15 to 24. To be specific, 53% of women aged from 45 to 54 were doing regular physical activity while only 43.1% of men in the same age group were physically active. As for male citizens, they were most active from 15 to 24, and 52.8% of them did regular exercise.

The proportion of women who joined regular physical activity saw an increase until the age of 54, and then it dropped a little. However, the figure for men decreased from 15 to 44 and then climbed up to 46.7% at the age of 65 and over.

To summarize, women in Australia were more physically active than men in most age groups whereas male citizens were most active at the age from 15 to 24.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, then, whereas, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 689.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41666666667 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29593693946 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532051282051 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 218.7 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.4542406555 43.030603864 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.4285714286 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.23603664747 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240123441371 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125733284974 0.103423049105 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495596568701 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151994337532 0.15604864568 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355967457657 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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