The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Given is a figure comparing the percentage of Australian males and females who did a physical activity in the year 2010 among different age groups.
It is interesting to note that the proportions of women in terms of doing physical practices were more in almost all age groups except 15-24-year-olds. While the least percentage of men doing the regular activity was among 35-44-year-olds, the lowest data for women was for those who are 65 or older.
Adult people that were in the age of 15 to 24 had the most percentage of physical activity for men with 52.8 percent. Females had a 47. 7 percent range of activity in this age group. The amount of doing exercise dropped sharply for males of 25 to 34-year-old to 42.2 percent. The figure for women did not change a lot, though.
The declining trend continued for men to 32.5 percent for 35-44-year-olds; however, women saw a considerable rise with 52.5 percent. The proportion of men who did physical activity rose steadily to 46.7 percent among 65 or over year olds, while women's activity fell to a low of just 47.1 percent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 280, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...the lowest data for women was for those who are 65 or older. Adult people that were in...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...or women did not change a lot, though. The declining trend continued for men to 32...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... a considerable rise with 52.5 percent. The proportion of men who did physical acti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 891.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73936170213 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84802056537 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537234042553 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3640557491 43.030603864 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315258992494 0.215688989381 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137179073476 0.103423049105 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102679405376 0.0843802449381 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228390745512 0.15604864568 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795408426098 0.0819641961636 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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