Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Indubitably, sugar is including harmful foods. although sugar is one of the most harmful substances that can cause various diseases all manufacturers use high levels of sugar to produce food and drink. In my opinion, one way to prevent sugary foods and drinks consumption is to increase these goods and I strongly agree with this issue.
For a good reason, governments should set taxes for manufacturers and companies that use a lot of sugar daily or weekly to produce sugary foods and drinks that make sellers get expensive their goods. By increasing the price of sugar in the short term people less consume sugar and it is good for them. Hence, can prevent people from consuming these foods. High taxes make companies choose a good and useful alternative food substance instead of sugar that is good for health. if the average rate of sugary foods increases a person may have a lot of dangerous sugar diseases.
Another point is companies and producers that produce sugary drinks and food can raise the price of drinks and food that use more sugar. all companies should notice people's health and must care about it. they can set a rule if the sugar exceeds the limit people should pay extra money for drink or food. This makes people reduce their consumption of high levels of sugar.
In conclusion, although sugary drinks are harmful to health people like them and if use these goods make addicted to them. It caused various sugar diseases that in the future will harm themselves. One way that can prevent consumption of people is to reduce the price of sugary goods. With this method, most people don’t use it except for their passion.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...ably, sugar is including harmful foods. although sugar is one of the most harmful substa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 476, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...stead of sugar that is good for health. if the average rate of sugary foods increa...
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Line 2, column 476, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...stead of sugar that is good for health. if the average rate of sugary foods increa...
^^
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...of drinks and food that use more sugar. all companies should notice peoples health ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, so, except for, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81272084806 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37678677192 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459363957597 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6720442346 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.125 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299053213005 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117615198669 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526415508598 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211770399565 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508439389087 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
...ably, sugar is including harmful foods. although sugar is one of the most harmful substa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 476, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...stead of sugar that is good for health. if the average rate of sugary foods increa...
^^
Line 2, column 476, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...stead of sugar that is good for health. if the average rate of sugary foods increa...
^^
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...of drinks and food that use more sugar. all companies should notice peoples health ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, so, except for, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81272084806 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37678677192 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459363957597 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6720442346 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.125 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299053213005 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117615198669 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526415508598 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211770399565 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508439389087 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.