The bar graph shows the number of people employed in different workplaces in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008 Summarize the data by selecting and reporting key factors and making comparisons where appropriate

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The bar graph shows the number of people employed in different workplaces in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarize the data by selecting and reporting key factors and making comparisons where appropriate.

The given vertical bar graph compares the amount of individuals employed in sales, computing, accounting, nursing and farming in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008.

Overall, it can be seen that the sales sector had the maximum workforce, while the minimum amount of employed was noticed in the farming sector in both years. Moreover, employment figures did not show any significant change in any other sector in between the two years.

In 2001, approximately 180,000 workers were employed in the sales sector. After that in the next seven years, a slight rose was noticed 10,000 more people employed in sales. The employees in computing and nursing sector also experienced minimal growth from 100,000 to 120,000 in the computing sector and from 40,000 to 50,000 in the nursing sector between the given period of tenure.

A a quick glance to the remaining information, the manpower in the accounting and farming sector declined with time. In 2001, the workforce in the accounting sector just less than one lakh were employed and only 30,000 people worked in farming fields. In the accounting sector, the figure stood at just over three quarters and a negligible amount of employment was noticed in the farming sector in 2008.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1041.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10294117647 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55994547562 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8876190269 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126508638321 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069338011364 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713491858306 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105456289479 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831572683196 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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