The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15 year olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK

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The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.

Given is the bar chart depicting how much time British children from 10 to 15 spend on two activities, namely socializing on the Internet and entertaining on game consoles per day.
It is conspicuous that the percentage of time which boys spend on playing games is higher than that of girls, while the reverse is true for expenditures on chatting. Additionally, the total time spent playing on the game consoles is more popular than the remaining activity.
When it comes to chatting online, nearly 70% of 10-15 years old girls prefer communicating online on a daily basis, in comparison with 55% of boys. Moreover, the majority of girls spend from 1 to 3 hours doing this activity, meanwhile, the lowest proportion that girls and boys spend over 4 hours is 9% and 2% respectively.
It turns to play on smart devices, the percentage of boys spend their time on entertaining through game consoles is so far the highest percent with around 85% with half of them spend from 1 to 3 hours per day and 10% of boys play over 4 hours. As opposed to girls, with less than 35% of boys, most of them spend less than an hour playing daily.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 931.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60891089109 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64718204644 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574257425743 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.7396094424 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318066745202 0.215688989381 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143940759773 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066502911049 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190614854764 0.15604864568 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497229515363 0.0819641961636 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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