The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018

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The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.

Submitted by Dangdang on Sat, 05/27/2023 - 06:12

The line graph illustrates the number of store closures and new shops in a nation from 2011 to six years later.

Overall, the number of closed and opened shops fluctuated with a downward trend throughout this period.

Concerning the number of store openings, which commenced at around 8500 and decreased sharply by 4500 in 2012, afterward, the figure increased steadily to 6000 in 2014, then declined in 2015 to the same number as it had been in 2011. In the following year, the number of new shops remained stable and slightly rose to around 200 in 2017. At the end of the period, the number of opened stores was accounted for at 3000, which was nearly half of it at the beginning.

Regarding the shop closures, the number of these stores was recorded at around 6200 in 2011 and declined to 6000 in the following year. In 2013, the figure of defunct retialers reached its peak, which was accounted for at about 7100. After the moderate rise, there were fewer closed-down stores in 2014, and the number was nearly the same as it was in 2011. From 2014 to 2015, the number of closed shops witnessed a rapid decrease to around 600, which hit the lowest point of the whole chart. However, within a year, a growth of 4500 was seen in the number of closed shops, which remained stable two years later.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a nation from 2011 to six years later. Overall, the number of closed and opened...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...downward trend throughout this period. Concerning the number of store openings,...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as nearly half of it at the beginning. Regarding the shop closures, the number ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, regarding, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1073.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 233.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60515021459 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28221280237 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489270386266 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.9 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0383584949 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.3 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.23603664747 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360413558333 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170808266704 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094031199536 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265713236867 0.15604864568 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316756532026 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a nation from 2011 to six years later. Overall, the number of closed and opened...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...downward trend throughout this period. Concerning the number of store openings,...
^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as nearly half of it at the beginning. Regarding the shop closures, the number ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, regarding, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 33.7804878049 160% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1073.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 233.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60515021459 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28221280237 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489270386266 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.9 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0383584949 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.3 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.23603664747 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360413558333 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170808266704 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094031199536 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265713236867 0.15604864568 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316756532026 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.