The charts below show the percentage of men and women in different weight groups in England between 1993 and 2002.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the percentage of men and women in different weight groups in England between 1993 and 2002.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two charts illustrate the percentage of english men and women divided into seperate weight sectors from 1993 to 2002.

In general, most of England’s people were overweight, but the rate of english who were dangerously obese remained the same throughout the period of nine years with the modest proportion (approximately 1%).

Particularly, 10% and about 41% of men in England were recorded to be obesed and and be overweighted in 1993 respectively. The proportions rose substantially to 15% and around 49% in 2002 respectively, while, in contrast to those figures, the percentage of men that have healthy weight declined by nearly 10% simultaneously.

Compared with the weight disparity of the male population, that of female is quite similar with the raise in the percentage of women who obesed and those who overweighted during the nine years period. women with healthy weight also decreased to just over 30% in 2002 whereas there was about 1% of english women are considered to be dangerously obese.

It can be seen that from both charts, the proportion of the male figure is lower than that of the female.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
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Line 7, column 202, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Women
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, whereas, while, in contrast, in general, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1027027027 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98731674897 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556756756757 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 288.0 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8271618271 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.857142857 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.23603664747 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171872179085 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087651310655 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706279959436 0.0843802449381 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0989444592799 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842323877143 0.0819641961636 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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