The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The given diagram illustrates the linear process of producing bricks to meet the demands for building.
It is evident from the diagram that this is a man-made process consisting of several stages. Additionally, the manufacture begins with the collection of clay and culminates with the delivery step.
During the initial stage, a digger is used to collect clay, which is then put on a metal grid to eliminate any gravel. Once this step is finished, the material is brought into a special machine called the roller. Afterwards, clay is mixed with sand and water to be ready to go through a wire cutter or be moulded. The products of both steps are bricks, which are subsequently stored in a drying oven.
The process continues with the stage in which the bricks are heated by high temperatures. During this step, they are passed onto the first kiln where they are heated by moderate temperatures ranging from 200 C to 980 C. Following that, high temperatures in the second kiln heat them. Next, they are placed into a cooling chamber for 48-72 hours and then packaged. Finally, the packaged bricks are transported to supermarkets where customers can purchase them.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, second, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 972.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93401015228 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68362341359 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619289340102 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 16.3967730565 43.030603864 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.0 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183392580895 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657937328589 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740799141154 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124804197274 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0705322807954 0.0819641961636 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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