The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The change at West Park Secondary School between 1950 and 2010, a-60 year period, is depicted in the diagrams.

Overall, it is a clear that radical transformations occurred in left of school areas. In the other side, while school building had no changes over the periods, playground seemed slight difference.

In 1950, there were residentials in the north west of maps, but after 30 years, those buildings were demolished, replacing with Car park and Science block. Following of those trends, Farmland in the south west had been converted with Sports field by 1980. However, Car park extended by removing Sport field in 2010.

When it comes to the right side, School building had no changes over the period, the same condition with Main road. In contrast, Sport field that be removed due to extending Car park as aforementioned before, was shifted by taking place part of playground area in the south. Therefore, that area was smaller in 2010 compared with the one in 1980.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Car) must be used with a third-person verb: 'parks'.
Suggestion: parks
...ld that be removed due to extending Car park as aforementioned before, was shifted b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 821.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00609756098 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58037801187 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628048780488 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.858870889 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2222222222 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.23603664747 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152921566138 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650123732859 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623584515055 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11054397141 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689782053563 0.0819641961636 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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