the diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

Essay topics:

the diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

The maps illustrate the differences between a school structure in 2004 and the renovation plan of that school in 2024.

Overall we can clearly see that the 2024 school will be able to hold more student than the previous version. The increase in capacity is mainly due to an additional school building and another car park on the northeast side of the site.

Firstly, the scenic of the school will be changed drastically in 2024 with the size reduction of the sports field. Placed in the north end of the school in 2004, the sports field will be relocated in the east side parallel to the school building number two. Part of the old sports field will be transformed into a second parking spot which also connected to the main entrance via a new road.

Secondly, the facilities of the school will also change greatly throughout the 20 years-period. As an example, at the site of the old sports field, there will be another school building with the capacity to withhold nearly 400 students. In addition, the path located in the middle of building 1 and 2 will be shortened and intersected with a new hallway that connects the two building together.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72772277228 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55768178324 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 18.1230362921 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.111111111 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.23603664747 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270821575644 0.215688989381 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133171988175 0.103423049105 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917531085628 0.0843802449381 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200589533159 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074372364171 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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