The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countires.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countires.

The line graph gives information about the rate of the total population regarding senior citizens who are 65 and above from 1940 to 2040 in Japan, Sweden and USA.

As an overall, it is clear that generally, the percentage of this old generations shows the upward trend throughout the period. Notably, Japan is expected to have a significant change in its total headcount over the period.

As for the USA and Sweden, the rate of the elderly who are over 65 started at nearly 9% in 1940 and two decades; there was a slight increase to 10%. Since then, it rose to nearly 15% and expected to remain the stable almost by 2020. However, it is anticipated to soar dramatically to about 24% in the final year. Meanwhile, Although the data for Sweden continued to a little bit lower than the figure of the USA until 1990, since 2000, these patterns have changed entirely, exceeding the USA's figures since 2000.

In the meantime, in Japan, the percentage of the population aged 65 and over was only 5%, which was the smallest and dropped to about 3% in 1960, and it remained the constant for 20 years. Ten years later, its figure gradually increased, and it is estimated to jump to almost 28%, which is the highest rate among all given categories.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: who is a are
...al population regarding senior citizens who are 65 and above from 1940 to 2040 in Japan...
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Suggestion: little; bit
...ough the data for Sweden continued to a little bit lower than the figure of the USA until ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... exceeding the USAs figures since 2000. In the meantime, in Japan, the percentag...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, regarding, so, then, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1026.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 221.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64253393665 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49300325142 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3569227788 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146404169616 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550648107332 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631668260085 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093425899625 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516773954976 0.0819641961636 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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