IELTS Academic Writing 10-3 Task 01The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comp

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IELTS Academic Writing 10-3 Task 01
The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts compare the four situations (part-time work, volunteer work, further study, and unemployment) that graduate and postgraduate students were in after leaving college in the UK in the year 2008.

First of all, it has to be clarified that university students are ten times more than postgraduate students. It is noticeable that both had the tendencies to keep studying. In contrast, most of them did not tend to do volunteer jobs. Otherwise, compared to university students, post postgraduates were more willing to do part-time work.

With respect to the university students in the UK, a majority of them chose to continuously learn, amounted to 29,665. The number of part-time work and unemployment kept the same pace, recorded at 17,735 and 16,235 respectively. However, the voluntary work stayed at 3,500 students, which is relatively lower than other statistics.

As for the UK postgraduates destine, 2725 students opted to have further study. Also, a lot of them coincidentally choose to do part-time work, amounted to 2535 units. Otherwise, The number of unemployment was 1625, which was less around one in three amount than further-study students. When it comes to volunteer work, few college students wanted to do it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...ne, 2725 students opted to have further study. Also, a lot of them coincidentally cho...
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Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'amount' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'amounts'.
Suggestion: amounts
...625, which was less around one in three amount than further-study students. When it co...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, incidentally, so, as for, as to, in contrast, first of all, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1045.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30456852792 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04889002291 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58883248731 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 305.1 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6588776542 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0833333333 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4166666667 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 5.23603664747 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186097340128 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069402219244 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661252685173 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133731088571 0.15604864568 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775584599914 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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