This is an IELTS Writing Task 2 sample answer essay from the real exam on the topic of kiwi fruit exports from New Zealand to various other countries.
The table above illustrates the export worth of New Zealand kiwis, calculated in the nation's respective currency (New Zealand dollars), to five countries, namely Japan, China, Mexico, Russia and Saudi Arabia, during the three years from 2010 to 2012.
Overall, it is transparent that Japan was the largest importer among the five importers throughout the researched period, while Saudi Arabia exhibited the smallest imported value. Additionally, all nations' imports of the studied products saw an upturn, with the exception of Saudi Arabia and Mexico.
271 million NZ dollars was the value of kiwis imported by Japan in 2010, after which the figure increased by 16,3 million in 2011 before reaching 325,3 million at the end of the research. China and Russia displayed similar trends, growing by approximately 9,8 million and 0,6 million the following year compared to their starting 75 and 0,9 million, then ending at 94 million and 2,4 million, respectively.
Meanwhile, the 2010 Mexico and Saudia Arabia import value of New Zealand kiwis was 6 million and 290 thousand dollars each. The data for Mexico then proceeded to experience a drop in the subsequent timestamp, falling to 2,4 million dollars and witnessing a slight rebound to 3,3 million afterwards. Saudi Arabia exhibited a more steady downturn, decreasing to 106 and 82 thousand dollars for each respective year.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
... of the studied products saw an upturn, with the exception of Saudi Arabia and Mexico. 271 million N...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28310502283 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66867535531 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 106.607317073 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616438356164 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 283.868780488 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7158342372 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.625 112.824112599 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 5.23603664747 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0698473067408 0.215688989381 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354120410495 0.103423049105 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508540171613 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0534765091479 0.15604864568 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560724399128 0.0819641961636 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.2329268293 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 40.7170731707 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 253, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
... of the studied products saw an upturn, with the exception of Saudi Arabia and Mexico. 271 million N...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28310502283 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66867535531 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 106.607317073 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616438356164 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 332.1 283.868780488 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7158342372 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.625 112.824112599 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 5.23603664747 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0698473067408 0.215688989381 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354120410495 0.103423049105 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508540171613 0.0843802449381 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0534765091479 0.15604864568 34% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560724399128 0.0819641961636 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.2329268293 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 40.7170731707 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.