The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped

Essay topics:

The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped.

The maps give information about the South Wing of Walton Museum was rebuilt between 2008 and 2012.

Overall, mostly rooms were changed or replaced by another rooms. The lift was constructed to replace the stairs.

Starting with entrance hall, the South Wing from 2008 to 2012 was still there. In the basement of this building, most of rooms were widened and stayed unchanged. Only cloaks room was disappeared and made way for children play area. In the first floor, the reception room was added to cloaks room, the reading room remained unchanged in 2012.

In the second floor, a terrace was built above entrance hall. This building constructed a restaurant above the reception and cloaks room. Instead of using stairs to go up, in 2010, citizens could use lift to go up. The right building of Walton Museum emerged self-service room and increased more one floor which is named "Exhibition room" in 2012.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 114, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the rooms') or simply say ''most rooms''.
Suggestion: most of the rooms; most rooms
...here. In the basement of this building, most of rooms were widened and stayed unchanged. Only...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'cloak'.
Suggestion: cloak
... floor, the reception room was added to cloaks room, the reading room remained unchang...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 768.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01960784314 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54086175732 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.627450980392 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 212.4 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.9452292595 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.8181818182 112.824112599 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9090909091 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219759442536 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910609755089 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120119087574 0.0843802449381 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167771133898 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136834713748 0.0819641961636 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 11.0658536585 54% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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