In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In the last years, there has been an increasing concern in the bond between equality and personal achievement. Some people assume that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian communities. Others think that high stages of individual achievement are probable only if people are free to succeed or fail according to their personal advantages. This essay will discuss the importance of equal opportunities.
People who assume that society equality is not important believe that the freedom in failing will help the person to reach his highest personal success. For instance, if a person lives in a country difficultly, he will try improve his life by succeeding. The hard life will force him to achieve important things so he can live comfortably. He did not have the chance so he will try to recreate it.
On the other hand, people who supports equality think that it's justice. If a child hates his community this may lead he won't bother himself by improving. He may be a genius but because of lack of Justice he will not use his cleverness. He will also hate people who reached high stages while he didn't have the chance.
In conclusion, absence of enquality will only lead to hateness between society's members and not all people will respond to it positively. My opinion is that egalitarian communities are crucial.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
... that society equality is not important believe that the freedom in failing will help t...
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Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pports equality think that its justice. If a child hates his community this may le...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...people who reached high stages while he didnt have the chance. In conclusion, abse...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 1.00243902439 1297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98198198198 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77606147773 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599099099099 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 283.868780488 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6521269879 43.030603864 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8571428571 22.9334400587 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263335797965 0.215688989381 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099532592133 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102863215581 0.0843802449381 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170694515951 0.15604864568 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135722936667 0.0819641961636 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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