The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

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The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The maps represents comparison of the changed roads to the city hospital between 2007 and 2010. It can be seen from the maps, that there are a lot of change around the city hospital.

First, the bus stops had been changed. In 2007, the bus stops had been separated six respectively and located both sides of the hospital road. however, in 2010, they were combined and bacame one bus station which was placed left side of hospital road.

Next, two roads also had been transformed better than the past. two roundabout were built which were located the junction of hospital foad and city road, hospital road and ring road.

Last developed facility is the car park. In 2007, either worker of the hospital or patients used the same car park. however, in 2010, they divided the car park, one is placed right side of the hospital road for their staffs and other is located across the right side of the hospital for the public.

To sum up, they developed their amenities and roads' type for not only customers but also their staffs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use 'represent'.
Suggestion: represent
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Suggestion: However
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Suggestion: Two
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Suggestion: However
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 854.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14772622357 2.65546596893 81% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2363247309 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6363636364 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5454545455 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341393974224 0.215688989381 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133551338951 0.103423049105 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122463352856 0.0843802449381 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185754039566 0.15604864568 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0969257292358 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.43 8.06136585366 80% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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