You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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The two pie charts show us the on line shopping sales in two years, 2005 and 2010. Both charts divide four retail sector by percentage of the amoutn of sales.

In 2005 the sector that had the greatest percentage was the electronics and appliance with 35% of the market while the worst sale percentage was 18% earned by the video game sector. In between those numbers, the graph shows home furnishing with 25% of the market and food and beverage with 22%.

Interestinling, only five years later, it's possible to notice a big change on the online sale. Food and beverage had a 10% increase on the marchet, becoming the greatest sector of the graph with 32%. While home furnishing had the biggest drop, also 10%, becoming the lowest percentage of the market. In between stood the video games sector with a increase of 5% and electronics and appliance with a drop of 5% also.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'sector' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'sectors'.
Suggestion: sectors
...nd 2010. Both charts divide four retail sector by percentage of the amoutn of sales. ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'games'' or 'game's'?
Suggestion: games'; game's
... the market. In between stood the video games sector with a increase of 5% and electr...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tween stood the video games sector with a increase of 5% and electronics and appl...
^
Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...tronics and appliance with a drop of 5% also.
^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'so', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.324022346369 0.268076937826 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.0782122905028 0.116061578633 67% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0502793296089 0.0759168565197 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0223463687151 0.0366838410393 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0111731843575 0.0131127313244 85% => OK
Prepositions: 0.150837988827 0.155750635184 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0223463687151 0.0379272487307 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4320099129 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00558659217877 0.0210936926555 26% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.139664804469 0.0948980150116 147% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00558659217877 0.00967000014798 58% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 877.0 1161.00487805 76% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.9 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65806451613 5.90752243213 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73763899035 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.303225806452 0.337110787985 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.18064516129 0.247514529752 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148387096774 0.171178102325 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0709677419355 0.112407865282 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4320099129 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535483870968 0.546246751206 98% => OK
Word variations: 43.1975466639 49.3433353143 88% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 8.93414634146 90% => OK
Sentence length: 19.375 23.0094962315 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5859444844 42.9750493124 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.625 135.714022679 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 23.0094962315 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.375 0.689975730869 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.84146341463 78% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.48048780488 270% => OK
Readability: 37.439516129 47.7609492067 78% => OK
Elegance: 4.45 2.94281807926 151% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428746077448 0.418131533498 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.186191157483 0.181151798455 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10067131616 0.0850326197045 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.669751070822 0.706616315825 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134792069794 0.157042692854 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.250002887443 0.228904883108 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114252993217 0.108899403657 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.507237204062 0.367819155151 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.147620619971 0.0812612215331 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.368528987544 0.316326947829 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587845497616 0.0921553760075 64% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70731707317 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.14146341463 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.08536585366 98% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.16585365854 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 0.956097560976 105% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.02926829268 132% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 7.1512195122 112% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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