have borrowed

Essay topics:

have borrowed

Dear Andrew,

Hi, I thought that I had better to write a letter in place of face to face conversation. Because this could be a serious problem. Do you remember MACBOOK laptop that I borrowed last saturday? I said I needed to finish my economic presentation but my computer didn't work.

Kindly, you understood my critical circumstance so that I had done my report and presentation perfectly. However, next day my cousins and grandparents were invited Joe's party which was hectic and drastic. After, they were all gone the laptop was placed in the floor then I opened and checked the screen to make sure having a clear condition. The screen film was broken and screen protector also had a huge damage.

I'm so sorry for delivering the tragic story and returning the broken laptop. One of good thing is the Black Friday which is upcoming next week and so many consumer electronics are on sale. I will buy for you the latest laptop. Again, I'm appreciate your kindness and caring to me.

Best wishes,

MJ

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Andrew, Hi, I thought that I had better to write...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in place of face to face conversation. Because this could be a serious problem. Do you...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...y economic presentation but my computer didnt work. Kindly, you understood my ...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...resentation but my computer didnt work. Kindly, you understood my critical circu...
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Line 6, column 400, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge damage'.
Suggestion: huge damage
...as broken and screen protector also had a huge damage. Im so sorry for delivering the tra...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...n protector also had a huge damage. Im so sorry for delivering the tragic stor...
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Line 8, column 235, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...l buy for you the latest laptop. Again, Im appreciate your kindness and caring to ...
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Line 10, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ndness and caring to me. Best wishes, MJ
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 26.3917525773 34% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77272727273 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61785726366 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.676136363636 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6695848634 44.8134815571 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6153846154 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5384615385 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15384615385 4.34317383033 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0694340294889 0.216113520407 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0191648519936 0.0766984524023 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460867336818 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0381708162282 0.12726935374 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282219082474 0.0580467560999 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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