You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter, describe the item, explain where and when you left it and say what action you would like the company to take.

Essay topics:

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter, describe the item, explain where and when you left it and say what action you would like the company to take.

Dear Manager,

I am writing to report lost property. I forgot my camera on the train last week. It is the lateest camera I bought last week for 590 dollars. It is a black colour sleek model from Canon. It was freshly sealed in a leather case and enclosed in a white cardboard box. The entire size of the package would be around 10 to 12 cm in length and breadth.

I lost this camera last Friday evening during traveling on the central line. I boarded the fast train from Andheri station at 6:30 PM. I got into the first-class compartment which was around midway through the platform. I had several bags with me including the camera box. Due to less space in the upper racks, I put my camera box under the seat. Unfortunately, I forgot to take it while getting off at Mulund station.

I purchased this camera with the intention to gift it to someone. I am very eager to get it back. I earnestly request you to ask your staff to search the compartment. I would be really grateful to you. If you find it please give me a call on my number 1234567890.

Thank you for your support.

Yours sincerely

MJ

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Manager, I am writing to report lost property. I ...
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Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... a black colour sleek model from Canon. It was freshly sealed in a leather case an...
^^
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... train from Andheri station at 6:30 PM. I got into the first-class compartment wh...
^
Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...was around midway through the platform. I had several bags with me including the ...
^
Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...omeone. I am very eager to get it back. I earnestly request you to ask your staff...
^
Line 7, column 168, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...k your staff to search the compartment. I would be really grateful to you. If you...
^
Line 7, column 203, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ent. I would be really grateful to you. If you find it please give me a call on my...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 910.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 206.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41747572816 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46661180867 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631067961165 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 12.6804123711 150% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 16.3608247423 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.6272668218 44.8134815571 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 47.8947368421 76.5299724578 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 10.8421052632 16.8248392259 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.47368421053 4.34317383033 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.94845360825 253% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139491895286 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441482164072 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571716009622 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105079898104 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661996012723 0.0580467560999 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.8 8.37731958763 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 86.71 70.7449484536 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 3.7 7.45979381443 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.17 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 7.59969072165 87% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 8.62886597938 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 8.54432989691 70% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 8.15463917526 61% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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