A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter:

describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a resident of Seven Bungalows in Versova and appreciate the initiative your company is taking to spend INR 40 lacs on benefiting our area.

As you know cricket is like a religion in India and it is no different over here as well. We have a young cricket team with promising individuals who have great skills. The funding will help to provide national class coaching and better cricketing gears for them, thus bettering their prospects to become part of State level team.

For elderly and working class though, some concerts will really help to digress from their mundane daily life. A ghazal program of Jagjit Singh will really be soothing for the old people and stress buster for working class. For younger generation you can plan a rock concert as that will energize the whole area and also improve the visibility to younger generation as teenagers from other areas will also come to visit this concert.

Although I believe concert will momentarily help the older generation to feel refreshed, but the thought of how this money can improve the future of young children in our area, I think you should prioritize funding the sports team for two years.

Looking forward to an early decision on the same.

Yours sincerely,
Atul Sharma

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, really, so, thus, well, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1064.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 217.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90322580645 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40385201998 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668202764977 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 319.5 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7587256568 44.8134815571 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.4 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 16.8248392259 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 4.34317383033 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203499825631 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690437536079 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548672983171 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093131335498 0.12726935374 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649415417716 0.0580467560999 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 8.37731958763 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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