A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years , or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the co

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years , or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts
Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Jitender Singh and i am writing this letter to give my views about the money you want to spend in our area.

I have just heard about your plan to use some money for promoting local offspring sports team for two years. In my views, it is a good idea as in our area all the younger’s who have joined sports team came from middle class family and local authorities can contribute very less to enhance their skills. If they get sound facilities like infrastructure and good sports equipments they can perform better in the tournaments and can get the medal for our area. Also they do not need to ask for their parents for support them financially for pursing them in sport.

About your another idea of spending money for two open air concerts in our area is also valuable. Many music lovers are living in our area and these type of concert will give them chance to meet some of the superstars of their field. Also all the people for our area can come and enjoy these types of event.

But as per my opinion your company should spend these funds to develop the career of our area’s youngsters who have great caliber.

Yours faithfully
Jitender Singh

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 989.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6214953271 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33972200601 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588785046729 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.7291664682 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307558738799 0.216113520407 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131319592007 0.0766984524023 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946142285795 0.0603063233224 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162948192013 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845664820134 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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