Write a letter to a college principal, where you attended a one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted. Explain:what was the type of the coursewhat happened and what can be done to make sure this problem never occurs again.

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Write a letter to a college principal, where you attended a one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted. Explain:
what was the type of the course
what happened and what can be done to make sure this problem never occurs again.

Dear sir,

I am Harry, Recently I and my friends attended one-day course in your newly established college branch at providence. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction from the course.

Like many of my friends, I was really excited for the course. we were astonished to see huge number of students who arrived to attend that course. Unfortunately, I was really disappointed by the arrangements. To start with, there were not enough seating arrangements, however we decided to attend the lecture standing. The voice of lecturer was really low; hence she was not audible to back benchers. Moreover, in this hot weather, there was not even water arrangements. As we forgot to bring water bottle we were thirsty all the time.

I request you to make groups of student instead of one batch for all the students. this would solve the seating problem and all the student would listen the lecture suitably. this way student could benefit from the course. also, it would be appreciated, if you could arrange drinking water for the students.

I hope you consider our problems seriously and implement the above listed suggestions to improve the situation.

Yours sincerely

harry.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: We
...s, I was really excited for the course. we were astonished to see huge number of s...
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Line 5, column 472, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... there was not even water arrangements. As we forgot to bring water bottle we were...
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Suggestion: This
...tead of one batch for all the students. this would solve the seating problem and all...
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Suggestion: This
...dent would listen the lecture suitably. this way student could benefit from the cour...
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Suggestion: Also
... student could benefit from the course. also, it would be appreciated, if you could ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our problems seriously and implement the above listed suggestions to improve the ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Harry
...ve the situation. Yours sincerely harry.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, moreover, really, so, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1006.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 197.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10659898477 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8130897033 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61421319797 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.50938825 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.0666666667 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1333333333 16.8248392259 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186779176952 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059795245834 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034316505076 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100805154276 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322163572314 0.0580467560999 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.47 8.71597938144 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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