You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter• Give details of your study plan• Explain w

Dear Martha,

I am doing fine and hope you are better. I have been offered admission in Griffith University to get my masters degree in Mass Communication. I will be moving there by next month, so I wanted to get some useful advice from you regarding part time job.

My classes are scheduled from Monday to Thursday in the morning. I will be free from 2:00 PM on wards while my weekends are completely free. I want to earn some good money for bearing my expenses, so give me some information about which jobs to be done and how to search and grab a part time job.

I would like the kind of job which does not affect my studies because if i could earn some good grades in my courses, I may be offered a scholarship worth $7000 which would ease my stress a lot. I can do physically demanding jobs but desk jobs would be more decent. White collar positions are not easy to win. My primary goal is to study but I want to support myself. I do not want to be dependent on my parents anymore.

Hoping to receive a quick reply.

Yours Sincerely,

Yo

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 26, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you're
...ear Martha, I am doing fine and hope youre better. I have been offered admission i...
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Line 4, column 141, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...y masters degree in Mass Communication. I will be moving there by next month, so ...
^
Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...t some useful advice from you regarding part time job. My classes are scheduled from ...
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Line 6, column 283, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...to be done and how to search and grab a part time job. I would like the kind of job ...
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Line 6, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...how to search and grab a part time job. I would like the kind of job which does ...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o search and grab a part time job. I would like the kind of job which does n...
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Line 8, column 74, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...h does not affect my studies because if i could earn some good grades in my cours...
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Line 8, column 254, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...o study but I want to support myself. I dont want to be dependent on my parents anym...
^^^^
Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Yo
... a quick reply. Yours Sincerely, Yo Yo
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, so, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 769.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34463276836 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41563581087 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649717514124 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 236.7 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5672179057 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.9090909091 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0909090909 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176121915202 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607921818466 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632164370977 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911654164818 0.12726935374 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640844703998 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 8.71597938144 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.