Dear Smith
It is long time since we met at melbourne last summer,Hope you are well.I am very glad to tell you that my student visa have been granted last month, and I am now parparing the enroll to the university of melbourne. Unfortunately, I did not grant the scholarship. So I plan to take a part time job then.
I plan to enroll next month, the 5th May. As I did not get the updated curriculum show what time I will be free for work. But there will be surely the weekend will be available. Beside the weekend, the summer and winter holiday will also a good time to take the part time job.
You may wonder why I need such part time job to earn money. Frankly speaking, my family is not well off to afford my tuition. and I still owned the university school loan in China. So I need to to work to afford my tuition and daily expense.
I know you migrated to melbourne for more than 5 years and the university of melbourne is just miles away from your home.
There might have numerous of job opportunities around there. I am seeking for the accountant position for some small business such as restaurant and supermarket. I am eager to heard from you if you have some job opportunities in hand, and I will send you my updated CV via e-mail.
Hope to see you soon
Best regards
Elliot.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Hope
...me since we met at melbourne last summer,Hope you are well.I am very glad to tell you...
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Line 2, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...melbourne last summer,Hope you are well.I am very glad to tell you that my studen...
^
Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nted last month, and I am now parparing the enroll to the university of melbourne. Unfortu...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 285, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...nt the scholarship. So I plan to take a part time job then. I plan to enroll next month,...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...liday will also a good time to take the part time job. You may wonder why I need such pa...
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Line 4, column 32, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...me job. You may wonder why I need such part time job to earn money. Frankly speaking, my...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...y is not well off to afford my tuition. and I still owned the university school loa...
^^^
Line 4, column 191, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...versity school loan in China. So I need to to work to afford my tuition and daily exp...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 177, Rule ID: EAGER_TO[1]
Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'hear'.
Suggestion: hear
...staurant and supermarket. I am eager to heard from you if you have some job opportuni...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ail. Hope to see you soon Best regards Elliot.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, frankly, if, may, so, still, then, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1053.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 244.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.31557377049 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48827875738 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573770491803 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 331.2 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8703590977 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.8125 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 4.34317383033 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247225199087 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746588795683 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709332760742 0.0603063233224 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133319128007 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447920836035 0.0580467560999 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 8.37731958763 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.18 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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