You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is impo

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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

Correct the information in the article

Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing the letter to request to correct some mistakes in your recent released travel magazine which name is “Le voyage”, There are some information relate to my home town is incorrect and misleading.

I am a local resident in the city of Chongqing , China, So I get familiar with most of the landmarks and tourist attractions here. In the page 131 of your magazine said “the entrance of the ancient tower HONGYA cave is located at the level 1” but actually it is located at the level 12 because the tower is built along the cliff.

From my point of view, It is quite a serious mistake and could misleading the traveller who were first been there. Actually, as a flagship magazine in the tourist industry, Providing accurate and detail information is benefit for you and your company.

Therefore, could you please correct the mistake as soon as possible and make an amendment notice in the next public of the magazine.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Your faithfully

Elliot

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 47, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... local resident in the city of Chongqing , China, So I get familiar with most of t...
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Line 7, column 64, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'mislead'
Suggestion: mislead
...It is quite a serious mistake and could misleading the traveller who were first been there...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to hear from you soon. Your faithfully Elliot
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 859.0 1615.20841683 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 177.0 315.596192385 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85310734463 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63085154965 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 176.041082164 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.64406779661 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.037919834 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.375 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241021207862 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902362210629 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780487210071 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115114057341 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851076546868 0.056905535591 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 78.4519038076 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 9.78957915832 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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