You are organizing a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services and explain when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains how long you will stay how m

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You are organizing a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services and explain
when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains,
how long you will stay,
how many students are in your party,
and what accommodation you will require.

Dear Mr. John,
My name is Robert Jane and I have received your contact details from one of my friends who availed your services recently.He gave very good feedback about your hospitality and arrangements.So we would also like to go for the same hotel situated in Snowy Mountains.
I am arranging a trip of five days for the students of Perth in Western Australia. We are a group of 15 including 2 other staff memers.We would arrive on 6th April.We will check in first,put the luggage and then directly go for sight-seeing.
We would prefer three sharing room as it will be economical for the students and convenient as well.We have blankets, torch, gloves with us.We would appreciate if we get extra blankets with the heater.Also, I checked that breakfast is included in the package.I hope there is no change in it still.Can you please check and let me know if there is any other changes in the packages done?
I am sure you will definitely get back to us.
Yours sincerely,
Robert Jane

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...itely get back to us. Yours sincerely, Robert Jane
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, still, then, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 821.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7183908046 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73505861852 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.683908045977 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 16.3608247423 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.003525593 44.8134815571 290% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 76.5299724578 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 16.8248392259 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 4.34317383033 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 2.54639175258 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158151212217 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839250608192 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064332858418 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0994655977713 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350437329965 0.0580467560999 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 8.37731958763 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 7.45979381443 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 8.54432989691 159% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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