You are working for a company. Your computer is giving some problem and it is affecting your work. Write a letter to the manager in your letter.-Describe the problem-Explain how it is affecting your work-Write what want him to regarding it

Essay topics:

You are working for a company. Your computer is giving some problem and it is affecting your work. Write a letter to the manager in your letter.
-Describe the problem
-Explain how it is affecting your work
-Write what want him to regarding it

Dear Mr Smith,

my name is Anita Becker, I work in administration department. I am writing to inform you about the challenge I am having with my computer.

The computer keeps freezing and rebooting by itself. when I turn the computer on, it takes more than ten minutes for it to come up, and when it eventual does, it freezes at the homepage before loading the desktop icon. Then, it will restart again. This has been going on continuously for three hours now.

since I can not access the computer due to its persistent problem of freezing and restarting . Thus, it is impossible for me to update the information of clients on our database. In order for me to update their details, I have to log into the computer and access the company clients database file in Microsoft Excel, which I can not. Therefore, making I can not ready do my job until the problem is resolved.

I would be grateful if you can send someone from the engineering department to take a look at the computer, and if possible fix it.

Yours sincerely

Anita Becker

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...keeps freezing and rebooting by itself. when I turn the computer on, it takes more t...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...on continuously for three hours now. since I can not access the computer due to it...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...stent problem of freezing and restarting . Thus, it is impossible for me to update...
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Line 13, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...x it. Yours sincerely Anita Becker
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, then, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 868.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6575979898 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661290322581 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5188683606 44.8134815571 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3333333333 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13817144216 0.216113520407 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466865847447 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391205415961 0.0603063233224 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0565652669869 0.12726935374 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299901887628 0.0580467560999 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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